Pretty cool descriptions actually. The seven sins are a good concept to wrap unique creatures around, see The Tower of Ash for example. But I'm glad to see that you have gone different ways than us. :)
The formatting is a little off in places, but it does not detract from the reading. Oh, and special bonus for the written up ways of laying them to rest - that is always good to have with undead monstrosities around. Good work! Go to Comment
I like! I have a fondess for personifications of the Seven Deadly Sins, and due to a particular quirk of my own, *undead* personifications of said Sins make me even happier. Well written, nice imagery, and definitely not yout average revenants.
Although I do have to wonder what would happen if some any of the different types of Sinners ended up in the same geographical area. Go to Comment
Okay, her background and development sound pretty good, and make sense. The short trip to absolute power came to a deserved horrible end. The question is, what is she now... is she a mere monster of uncontrolled power, or is there a chance of saving her? And even if she is saved, by now she has a reputation of a mass murderer, and it is deserved.
How could she be saved... how could she be stopped, for that matter, without a huge loss of life? (Also, is it only human souls she can use? Could not animals be a valid target, or something else? Okay... hard to look for victims at this powerlevel.)
Not a bad idea, though it may be hard to apply in a game. Go to Comment
I like her, definitely an interesting variation of a villian. I think my favorite part is that as bad as her plight is, it's her own fault. Hubris on a grand scale. Of course, fighting her would end up being one of those "Unstoppable force" things. Go to Comment
She's meant to be a villain - one who is not evil for evil's sake, but rather out of need. Not that any of the victims care!
If she managed to shed energy recently, she's your average moderately sinful moderatly flawed person who can use a little flattery for one's ego, and a little compassion too. After all, in elven terms, Rilei is just a teen.
And yes, she can let her energies drain away only through humans.
As for saving? Perhaps some artifact that can take away a mage's talent and all magical aptitude could be what might cure her, and can be used as a way to tempt her to do one's bidding. Go to Comment
I like the concept of the elven mage who failed to understand her limitations and was transformed into a vortex of destruction, but I was less enthralled by her personality: I imagine that she might find a conscience, even as the pain reduces her to a level of basic survival.
I suspect that most player characters finding her would try to destroy her as soon as they understood what she really was. She might be a hard one to kill, though, as a sort of "magic elemental". Go to Comment
Pretty neat, I like the descriptions of the different civilizations and the relationships between them. I think I like the Mandaans more than the Samman, although I'm not sure why. This would be a nifty planet to drop a malfunctioning ship on, particularly because it would prove... interesting if the Samman found it and claimed it for their Exalted. Go to Comment