I'll echo Moon here and say that this is an awesome post. Just to be absolute;y sure, the physical transformation that they undergoe is determined by the unique social situations surrounding them right? Man, these are the kind of warriors that just have to be pitted against the most fearsome foes that exist in fantasy RPG. Go to Comment
I echo once again, "Woah". These men, or beasts, if you like, are well rounded, with an interesting backstory. They have more than a touch of flavor, and are also useful. Echo, if you're rusty, then I'd like to read what you wrote at the top of your game. Go to Comment
Manfred captured some of my thoughts. A long flowing story that was very well done. The interspersed quotes broke up the reading quite well and gave me some concrete sections to capture, might be too unwieldy without them. Go to Comment
In some way, she reminded me of Galadriel - not due to any similarity, but for all the contrast, and yet akin epical impact on the surroundings the 'Lady of the Forest' will have. She would prove to be an amusing benefactor, just don't forget your position, ever.
I was surprised to find forests in Nesseraum, considering it is a blasted desert of mutants and drug addled cultists. That aside, there were a few spelling errors, mostly the last letter being left off of worlds, clas instead of claws, fiels instead of fields. The spacing of the paragraphs and the margins seem choppy and it could use a good polishing just from the formatting end.
Technicalities aside, I liked this submission, and the way the perspective move from bird to bird. The only real request I have is a link back to the Intelligent Race that inspired this character. Go to Comment
I was enraptured reading this, Echo. Wondferfully written, especially the, "if we were to fly..." stuff! She is somewhat familiar, in that vague, alien sense. A beautiflly rendered NPC! A queen's queen. Full of majesty, guarded grace, and natural power.
Her tale flows well and doesnt bog down anywhere. Cant think of any criticisms. Perhaps a bit more on interacting with Seheth from a PC perpective, but then again, this legendary tale doesnt really need it the ubiquitous plothooks.
One question. Umm, Nesseraum? I believe I have a pock-marked desert land on this site, which bears same name ;)
this is a situation known to relax the sphincters :) Go to Comment