very cool! and also very creepy. having you daughter grow up to be your old GF is scary on its own, but having your entire kingdom like this would probably send you insane. the king would probably be on the edge of sanity when the PCs intervene. ohhhh, goodies... and if you include cheka's suggestion, you could also have a kingdom ripe for the taking by power hungry PCs... Go to Comment
I like this, ALOT. I think I am gonna use this with my current game that I just started....perhaps linking it to this bizarre idol I am gonna have my PC's find. This will lead them into dungeon crawls, research, ALL sorts of things.
Amazing. This, plus my OTHER plot line, will make for a VERY interesting game.
Just gotta modify it a bit, to fit the world, and BAM, there I go. Go to Comment
Very impressive sub, and one I;d nominate for a golden sub if I could.
An interesting twist would be to do a campaign with the char being a "Nemithia" whose mother fled with her from the kingdom soon after she was born, thus making her a unknowing pawn of forced beyond her comprehension. (struggling to resist possession by the evil spirit while finding the reason behind this strange creeping possession/haunting and how to put a stop to it would make for a fun campaign.
I like how the cold-blooded nature distorted their development - along with the solution. A few more comments:
- I find the concept of a gas giant concentrating sunlight on another planet hard to accept... it would have to be a truly unique composition of gases indeed; a strange kind of atmosphere; and a strong relation between the positions of the sun, the gas giant, and the planet (Lagrange points would do the trick). But, it is probably not impossible, and there are other ways a planet could gain a Heat Zone, so let's keep it.
- Weather is made in a large part by differences in temperature. So if there are radically different regions, like on this planet, there will be quite some exchange of air between them. Methinks you should add some really strong weather to this world.
- How is Tallis actually made? The exact process is not important, but it seems that it can be only produced on their homeworld. No matter how difficult it is, there will be a) attempts to reproduce it, and b) replacement drugs, experimental even.
Still a good submission, these fellows have some colour. Go to Comment
Me likes too. I agree about the weather also. Good idea, and worthwhile execution. Somewhat reminded of Dune, but the reptillian take and the pirating show this is original. And the implementation of the suggestions answers some questions. A well deserved 4/5! Good one. Go to Comment
Anyhow: I like it. Nothing much to say really, except that I love the twists. Also it reminds me somewhat of Caligula, that old Roman dog. Feels nice to say something that would have cost me my head 2000 years ago :) Go to Comment
Updated: Well, when I first submitted this into In Work, I didn't nominate it as a Quest entry, but it obviously is intended to be one. Is there a way that I can make it so? Go to Comment
Updated: You're right; spiders don't make sense, so I've changed it to other plain-dwellers who might seek shelter.
The large amount of dust is partially because the ghost is one of those resentful types, who tries to get away with as little work as possible, and partially because I envisage animals frequently walking in and out of the shrine - perhaps to drink from the troughs - and they would track dust behind them.
As for poor Emperor Haius, I typed 'the Magnificent' at first, but my fingers refused to stop there. Go to Comment
a diamond-studded suit of leather barding? wow, depending on size and cut of said studs, it could be worth a freakin fortune/small kingdom/kiss the economy goodbye!!
I'm guessing they are chips and flakes, for the sparkle and visual effect?
As to the dungeon, I like it! Nice twists and turns as others have said . Good work! Go to Comment
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