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Scrasamax's comment on 2015-02-09 01:18 AM
Axle pretty much summed it up nicely. I don't know how much would end up in aircraft, since most aircraft, even in WWII were either wood or aluminum. Not a lot of iron ends up in fighters, and the old iron isn't going to be alloyed with aluminum, because the two metals do not mix. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-08 10:12 PM


This has the makings a great saturday morning cartoon show and toy line. Do they still have saturday morning cartoons and toy lines. I love this idea. I really really really wanted to love this write up. But this core concept has been done in almost every genre I can think of



Horror: Christine,



Thriller: Maximum Overdrive,



Sitcom: My Mother The Car & Heat Vision and Jack (yeah they didn't last long)



War: Sgt. Rock and the Haunted Tank



Crime: Knight Rider



Post-apocolyptic sci-fi: Tankgirl



I am sure there are others...like Cars or Planes



So if you wanted to revisit the smart car idea, I assume you would want to have original take on it. Which essentially i think you do have here



"Powerful magicians bound these spirits into cages of iron and forged them into mighty blades and coats of steel. Excalibur. Galatine. Durandal....it is in a complex machine that the spirit truly shows its power"



That is a great first step toward doing something new with the smart super car idea.



But that is truly all you give us, that could be an idea seed, a hundred word. post. If you going to give us a whole post than develop the plots hooks or the specific eccentricity of your vision of the car. We already know all about these self motivated cars, whether or not they can fix themselves is story specific concern.



One suggestion for fleshing this post out (cause paragraphs 3-5 don't do anything for anybody) is to you write up seven ancient magical weapons as cars or vehicles in one or more of your plot hooks. You sell this an item write up, give us pretty chrome and comfy fluff for the item.



Or you could just do a whole plot write up of British Partisans with super sports cars representing the ancient hero spirits England fighting nazi's in alternate history england. Because THAT. IS. AWESOME. a much better idea than James Bond Jr. or MASK.

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axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-09 11:15 PM

King Arthur and the Rockers of the Roundabout



Setting: 1962 Nazi Occupied Britain.



Premise: In 1942 Germany successfully invaded England, and by 1962 now a whole generation has been born under German rule. But there is hope. The spirits of King Arthur’s Knights have returned bound to medieval weapons. Unfortunately, these longswords, even those imbued with the honor and chilvary of the round table are no match the modern german war machine. The mystical weapons are scattered and confused. But a man has a plan. The author J.R.R. Tolkien uncovered Merlin’s staff. But instead of using the staff directly he fused with it his Rolls Royce, now Merlin has a second life as an enchanted spell-casting car. Tolkien hopes that by combining the spirits of the round table with modern machinery he can free England from the yoke of tyranny. He knows though that these spirits will need guides to wield them and direct them so Tolkien also seeks out fresh young people to fight alongside King Arthur’s Knights.



Set-up: The plot will play out in five episode game secession arcs with each episode game lasting 18 minutes. The players will get their characters assigned to them.



Episode Secessions 1-5 The Once and Future King : A 13-year-old teenage American Ex-pat orphan is attending boarding school and unable to return home he sent to stay with an elderly writer. Accompanying him to the house is 17-year-old Pete Townsend. Tolkien and Merlin fill them on the details, and introduce them to the sword of Sir Kay. The boys tell them that they need to travel to London, then Liverpool, then New Castle and other places to gather the scattered swords of the Round Table. Pete being the older boy takes Kay and fuses him the Electric Milk Float…nobody will suspect and a Milk Float. At the end of Episode 1 they are ambused by a Mini Cooper and Aston Martin…it is Mordrid and Le Faye…and they have captured Kay, Townsend and the young American.



In the following episode you find out the Le Faye, Mordrid, Sparks and Plant just want to help even though Kay doesn’t trust them. But the enlarged group battle some Germans and gets to London and meets up with Dusty Springfield and Tristan. Next it is Newcastle and Burdon, then Liverpool and Lennon. Finally at the end of espisode 4 they find that group of Germans pulling a Jaguar out of Lake and trying to start it. The group gets over powered by the Germans, but out the mist steps King Arthur…the real deal in Armor and everything. He starts the Jaguar/Excalibur and rescues everybody. Finally at the end of Episode 5 the complete team and their allies free London from the Germans. They assemble at the Roundabout in front of Big Ben and Parliament and Arthur dubs them the Rockers of the Roundabout. At the end of the episode Arthur explains that though they have London as a base of operations, the Germans are still in England and still a threat. Then he asks the young American his name, and the boy says “Bruce, Bruce Springsteen”.



Other Arcs:



Auto-Bad: We find out German is really run by an Enchanted Battleship the Bismark, and that to recapture England he sends in Enchanted Spirit Cars of his own. Wagner, and Seigfried, a BMW and Mercedes, sports cars possessed by German heros. With them is Strega nona and Befana, a Ferrari and Lamborghini respectively possessed by Italian, witches. Finally they have with them Petain, a Renault, and their faithless French sidekick. The bad guys don’t have human drivers, the message is that are nothing more than a war machine now.



Mo’town: Wilson Pickett, Sam Green, Duke Fakir and Aretha Franklin show up driving supped up Detroit autos (Pickett, of course, drives a proto-type Mustang). We get to hear bunch of Mo’town classics. The cars don’t have spirits but they have a lot of tech, and they help them defeat the Germans that week. And the end of Wilson Pickett says to Arthur, “I guess our cars don’t have the spirits your cars have.” Arthur replies, “No but they have soul”.



Vikings : Saabs, Volvos and Audi’s show up with the spirits of the Norse Gods. At first they are working the Germans, but the Rocker’s convince them to switch sides



Mitsubishi : Tired of losing ground to these kids, Bismark calls in some Japanesse Allies with high powered motorcycles. To defeat this new threat the Rockers find Galahad’s sword, and fuse it with a Triumph Motorcycle. Bruce gets to ride that around.



Gwynevere : Morgan, Sparks, Tolkien and Merlin get lost in the Scotish Highlands running from a possessed Stuka. Taking advantage of this loss of wisdom and magic in the ranks of the Rockers, one of the Italian witches impersonates Gwynevere returned as a Nash rambler. A weird love triangle resurfaces.


Founding Rockers of the Roundabout:



Rocker: King Arthur



Songs: He is quite found of the Ballet of Maldon



Spirit: Excalibur, the spirit of England



Vehicle: Jaguar E-Type (silver)



Relationship: Arthur is the only one that can get this Jaguar to start.



Rocker: Dusty Springfield:



Songs: Wishin and Hopin, I Just Don’t Know What to Do with Myself



Spirit: Sir Tristan



Vehicle: AC Greyhound



Relationship: Sir Tristan is flirty and brash with a larger than life personality and is always coming on to Dusty. Dusty plays the mother hen to the wild bunch of Rockers, and tolerates Tristan less than polite behavior.



Rocker: Pete Townsend



Songs: My Generation, Hall of the Mountain King



Spirit: Sir Kay



Vehicle: Electric Milk Float



Relationship: Sir Kay is a stalwart accountant, cautious and the Cassandra for the group. He clashes with the brash Pete Townsend as the two provide the group with comic relief and logistical support.



Rocker: Michael Jagger:



Songs: Sympathy for the Devil, You Can’t Always Get What you Want



Spirit: Sir Percival



Vehicle: Triumph Herald Coupe



Relationship: The pensive and pious Percival clashes mightly with the lecherous, loud and playful Jagger. The only thing they can agree upon is that England should be free.



Rocker: John Lennon



Songs: Help, Let it Be, I am so tired



Spirit: Sir Lancelot



Vehicle: Citroen DS19



Relationship: Lennon’s sharp dry wit and sarcasism constantly go over Lancelot’s head, but the two of them work with Dusty to lead the team when ever Tolkien or Arthur are not around.



Rocker: Eric Burdon



Songs: Don’t Let Me Be Misunderstood, We Gotta Get Out of This Place



Spirit: Sir Gawain



Vehicle: Mark V, Covenanter Tank



Relationship: Eric and Gawain fit together well, both long to be in the spot light, but like Sir Kay and Townsend, they can never seem to get to the battle on time. Yet when they do get there they bring some “vocal range”.



Rocker: Bruce Springsteen



Songs: Born in the USA (lyrics slightly altered), Dancing in the Dark, The River



Spirit:None to start…Later Galahad



Vehicle: Triumph-Bonneville (motorcycle)



Relationship: When Galahad is summoned to help fight the Japanesse motorcycle teams brought into defeat the Rockers of the Round Table, Bruce and him form a tight friendship based on earnest and emotional communication.








Allies



Author: Murial Spark



Songs: She is a writer



Spirit: Mordred



Vehicle: Aston Martin DB4



Relationship: Spark is strongly independent and doesn’t deal well with authority or dominating personalities. That would include Kings, Professors, Dictators and Facists in general. She is quick to judge and not easy to impress. She has formed a strong bond with Mordred, and is very supportive of his self-pity and ambition. While both agree that the Germans need to be defeated, they aren’t sure if Tolkien and Arthur are the ones to lead England afterwards.



Author: J.R.R. Tolkien



Songs: Please don’t ask him to suggest a song.



Spirit: Merlin



Vehicle: Rolls-Royce Silver Cloud



Relationship: They have the jovial arguments of two old academics in the twilight of their years. They are almost always in agreement.



Rocker: Robert Plant



Songs: D’yer Mak’er, The Battle of Evermore, Immigrant Song



Spirit: Morgan Le Faye



Vehicle: BMC Mini Cooper S



Relationship: Morgan and the 14-year-old Robert Plant are both fun loving attention hounds. But Morgan is still a powerful sorceress even though she is car, and she is also a complete Celt-ophile. She wants the Germans out of England, but once they are gone she wants everyone that is not a Celt out England…which would include most of the English.

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valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:49 AM
I'm with Aramax. Yes, its ground that has been driven over before, but that can apply to 90% of everything.

Good ideas, neat stuff!
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Aramax's comment on 2015-02-10 08:42 AM
Couldn't disagree more with the votes on this. Truly amazing idea,well executed.Anything you want to add only will make it more AWESOME! 5/5 Go to Comment
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Strolen's comment on 2014-03-28 04:12 AM
The dark version of Jim Carrey's The Mask? :)

A fine cursed item. I found I had to reread a few paragraphs to get the gist of it, which affected the understanding, but overall pretty clear. I also like that you put it in many genres and simple scenarios. Not everything has to be epic and this is a good reminder of the possibility of using it in many different ways.

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Cheka Man's comment on 2014-03-16 01:26 AM
Useful and yet very dangerous at the same time. 5/5 Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-03 09:27 PM
The image of the faceless avenger and expeditor of the Id is a classic trope. I can just see Leslie Nielsen screaming at the little girl "Your mind refuses to face the conclusion." (for the kids: that is a reference to the Forbidden Planet the most influential space travel movie until 2001)

But really the visuals are very neat.

What if a group of ruthless individuals get the mask and know what it is? Could they hire actors to go live with the masks for a few days carrying diaries that saying "Man I really wish Goldman-Sacs would drop four points by monday"? Or something like that Go to Comment
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Strolen's comment on 2015-06-28 06:20 PM
I think this is brilliant!

When you said he loved the ladies I instantly thought, oh hum, another whoring sword. But then you dropped the bombshell it had to be wielded by a female. Awesome! Especially in the dynamics of the land, fantastic twist. And their egos are so weak they had to hide it and not use it. Love it!

Oh, and I want to hear the story about the rebellion of the wine-drinkers. That sounds hilarious, but probably isn't. Awesome name though!! Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2014-03-08 03:47 AM
An interesting idea for sure. I can see many things coming from this, a tradition of women crossdressing as men, a new tradition of Borakian ceremonial warriors, or even a thing where the woman bearing the sword is referred to as Chrysander and a number, such as when Chrysander VII lead the armies on the northern crusade or when Chrysander XII perished leading a contingent of marines against as island stronghold. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2014-03-07 08:17 PM
Interesting. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2014-10-16 03:16 PM
A perfectly reasonable 'cavete' for an intelligent magical sword to have, with significant cultural and political implications.

A daughter of Royalty might seek this item out in order to break out of her prescribed place in their society.
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The Town of Inexplicable Babies
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Dragonlordmax's comment on 2014-02-15 09:25 PM
It's a fair criticism. What would you like to see added to fill it out? Go to Comment
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Dozus's comment on 2014-02-10 09:02 PM
The image is quite funny, infants appearing out of nowhere. But the details you explore about what might happen in such a society, as well as the how/whys, make it something more interesting. Well done. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2014-02-11 03:56 PM
Quirky, I like it! And the explanations (if needed) can range from the silly to the sinister and everything in between. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2014-02-11 09:48 PM
Where ya been, axle? It's all about the idea. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-02-11 05:35 PM
A nice idea. But the content here seems to be little more than the idea alone. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-02-11 11:14 PM
I believe you're trying to bait me into further critique of this thing, well I ain't. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-02-20 07:00 AM


It is fine, I was wrong to suggest that it is little more than the idea. It is a fun useful idea with some plot ideas and 'possible' things tossed into to make this a tool as well as idea.



So well done.



However, The post-starts with a description of a village that one might find in a travel log in the world of Hairy trees. But you don't realize a village in the write up, and with no resolution, narrative or strong imagery (aside from the teaser) this write up doesn't paint a picture or tell a story. Thus you have a bit of false advertising with the title cause we don't get a village, we get the baby idea. It could be the apartment building of baby cabinets or the space station of baby bulkheads.



But it is a FANTASTIC idea, this plot device could be used to explore issues of affection versus paternity, racism, maternal instincts, the right to have a child versus the ability to raise a child, the fear of being saddled with a family or the inexplicable nature of life itself. I would love to colab on a bigger write up.

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valadaar's comment on 2014-02-11 02:25 PM
Wonderfully weird!



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