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Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Pieh's comment on 2009-03-29 06:01 PM
Axelrowes vote of a 1 was harsh, even in its incomplete form it wasn't that bad. Keep working on this idea. Hopefully he will change his vote. Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2009-03-27 04:20 AM
I strongly suggest you return this to the drawing board - for if I were to rate it now...
Really, look at some of the 4- to 5-star subs, to see what kind of article, in detail, originality and flair, to make. Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2009-03-29 01:06 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Drackler's comment on 2009-03-27 09:20 PM
Updated: After I posted this the first time, I mentally kicked myself because of how much I had forgotten to put in. So here is the new and improved version. Go to Comment
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Drackler's comment on 2009-03-28 05:51 PM
I am planning to, eventually, post Igg'soteku and Gluush as their own submissions soon-ish, and then link to them here. I figured that until that happened I could just give out what is necessary to use the Herthers as I see it. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-27 02:05 PM
I don't know what I would tell the PCs, and if a GM sent a wasp goat at us to sow lies and fears and gave us no more than whats above he would be in for a ton of questions. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-01 01:16 PM
I was asked to revisit my original post by Pieh and vote on the rewrite.

Do they have stingers?

The physical description of these things is much better, but many of the sentences are clumsy.
"Their heads are shaped like that of a goat and are covered in short gray or black fur, but mounted above its fanged mouth are two red bug-like eyes." is an example of such a sentence.

Also much of the discussion here is about this cult and their use for them. We have no idea how these thing originated, what particular agenda they may have or what an encounter with them would be like. I think describing an encounter with these would be the most useful way to expand upon them. It would allow the reader to get a 1st (or at least a more personal) look at the terror these things invoke, it would give the gamer a template for the use of these things in game play, and would give an overall picture of these things. Right now there is no overall picture, we just have a list of facts.

What is this post really about, the cult, the blood maddness or the goat-wasps? Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2009-04-01 07:40 AM
Is very bizarre and very nasty. A vision of madness no doubt. The reference to the rowen tree is good.

It does however feel forced on both it appearance and its nastiness for nastiness sake, and feels as little more then a boogyman. Motivations would help, as would the fleshing out of the linked concepts. Go to Comment
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Burt Mancuso's comment on 2009-06-09 02:30 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-27 10:47 PM
Much more self-contained and complete now (I can now give a 3.5 at least) but I would also like to suggest that you might look into expanding the description of Igg'soteku and Gluush (or are they part of a specific world that everyone knows except me as a non-gamer?). So again withholding vote. Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-28 07:12 PM
Most will probably say this is more of a stub material but still I'm sticking to 3.5 based on the fact that it is at least self-contained. Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-29 07:24 PM
Actually, there was an original shorter version of this (basically the first 2 paragraphs only and I think the 2nd paragraph also has been expanded on b/w the 2 versions, not sure whether you saw that one or not) and that's the one Axle voted on. Go to Comment
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slartibartfast's comment on 2009-03-27 01:54 PM
I concur with echoMirage; I think it has potential, but needs to be thought out more. Go to Comment
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slartibartfast's comment on 2009-03-28 05:28 PM
Much improved; more readable, and I see the seeds of some interesting ideas strewn about in there. Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-03-24 05:15 PM
Is he undead? Can he harm anyone? Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2009-03-25 01:07 PM
Cozy. Fitting for a fairytale RPG. Could easily make it more suitable for adult fantasy though. Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Murometz's comment on 2009-03-25 10:24 AM
I'm going with a combination of, "what axle, slart, and val said." :)

I like these type of peculiar, incongruous encounters, with a slight mythic, unexplained quality to them. A 'river runs out of his mouth' is neat. Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
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Drackler's comment on 2009-03-24 07:43 PM
Thanks, Moonlake, I saw that while writing and thought I'd fixed it, but apparently not. Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
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axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-24 06:03 PM
Much of the fantasy setting has been folded into the sensibilities that come with sci-fi and wargaming. For example if you steal the belt from a Frost giant, and it grants you giant strength does that mean that the Frost Giant was actually weak? Does that mean that the Frost giant you stole it from actually had double a "normal giant's" strength? Well in the mytho-historical fantasy setting those question won't matter. In a modern fantasy setting lets call it speculative-literary, things have a more defined nature and the laws of that nature is finite. So I am okay with this face just being a giant that fell asleep who occasionally chats with people.


That said, this is cute but not really useful or interesting. Maybe as part of a larger forest or something like that. Go to Comment
Old Stone Face
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axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-24 06:03 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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