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Bruin the Bellringer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
EchoMirage's comment on 2008-07-25 08:28 AM
This is a minor criminal, not a villain per se. He's not fit to be a lasting antagonist, nor especially evil.

Otherwise, not a bad idea. Go to Comment
Bruin the Bellringer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Drackler's comment on 2008-07-15 02:16 PM
Updated: Finished, and being posted as a normal submission. Go to Comment
Bruin the Bellringer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2008-07-21 07:13 PM
Not bad, though I would not imagine this scam lasting all that log. Most people would put two and two together eventually. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
manfred's comment on 2008-06-11 05:09 PM
Intriguing. The background holds little surprise, but the current situation has potential. Let me throw one question that seems to be unanswered: Why is it prison wardens?

One thing may be his job, but I'd like to think that it was a choice on his part. After all, if a prison warden is corrupt, it will sooner or later show. Also, they can learn much from the best sources on the crimes and immoralities of those in power, and sometimes can nudge their prisoners on a useful path...

You could have real fun with them. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
MoonHunter's comment on 2008-06-16 04:46 PM
In some ways, this should of been two submissions - one with Slyven Sallind and one with the Blackbirds.

So why prison wardens? What special power do they have other than they have some mutual contact with each other? And how many prisons does this land have?

Why not military nobles, or clergy, or ???

Well you get the idea. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Maggot's comment on 2008-06-11 04:20 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-06-10 05:37 PM
I like it, another good idea from you. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-06-18 09:35 PM
Maybe he thought prison would be a better and longer lasting, more drawn out punishment then an execution would be. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-07-15 03:52 PM
It's not unknown in real life for prisoners to become guards. It happened in the Nazi system (the "kapos") and in the Soviet Gulag system as well. And there used to be US prisons that used "trusties" as guards until they were shut down because of gross abuse. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2008-06-11 05:31 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Murometz's comment on 2008-06-11 07:21 PM
Not bad. I agree with manfred's take, but this is certainly usable. An intriguing idea, prison wardens out to screw the king. Hmm, I may play around with this concept for my campaign.

I would be remiss if I didnt add that I like the name Blackbirds, for a secretive group, and the rhyme starter is one of my favorites because it reminds me of Agatha Christie :) Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Drackler's comment on 2008-06-10 02:32 PM
Updated: Finished, and now being added as a Normal Submission. Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2008-06-18 06:33 PM
Above the comments on why, its pretty good, apart from the main character's survival. Why did the king simply not do away with him? Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Golanthius's comment on 2008-07-15 02:35 PM
I have asked myself the same question concerning the Pharoah and Moses... Go to Comment
The Blackbirds
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
Golanthius's comment on 2008-07-15 02:46 PM
Why would a prisoner (accused of murder) become a guard? Why not just escape? What kind of "odd jobs" can a prisoner do to earn money from guards? Alot of this doesn't make much sense. I could see him bribing the guards to leave a gate or two open, but that is about it. Go to Comment
The Deathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2008-05-21 08:50 PM
Thank goodness it is nonmagical and has absolutely no powers. :) The story built up predictably but the final nail hit with it being just normal made the submission worth every word. Go to Comment
The Deathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
CaptainPenguin's comment on 2008-05-22 11:56 PM
Very nice bait-and-switch. I'd love to put it in the hands of a villain and watch my heroes cower from his blow, hahaha. Go to Comment
The Deathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
MoonHunter's comment on 2008-05-29 01:50 PM
A finely crafted blade with expert metal work. I would assume that the Smith made other weapons of fine make. Thus , would could have another fine smith NPC as defined in Swords. Why does it always have to be swords? such as LLorryn of The Singing Steel or Nial Ironspirit.

I like weapons of repute with minimal to no magic. In Runebearer ( www.runebearer.com / http://www.cs.cmu.edu/~tpope/bostonia/frameset.html and a shout out to Chris Magoun who is a member here), weapons gain in power as their stories/ legends grow and wielders learn more of the item's history.

However spellish magic is not required. It is all about the reputation here. And that can be the greatest magic of all. Added to Interesting Weapons- Non-Magic While it is not a "class of weapons" as normally is the case for that submission, it is clearly appropriate.

This weapon, even if you don't use it directly, serves as a great example for your own world. It shows the power of reputation. Go to Comment
The Deathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
MoonHunter's comment on 2008-05-29 01:57 PM
Silly Moon, forgot to vote after that huge response. Go to Comment
The Deathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-05-22 12:00 PM
I like this submission. Go to Comment
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