suggestion: format the opening poem and the later one inside "centered blocks". Get rid of the slashes.
I liked this a lot. A weird island, a weird people, and some weird gems. What more do you want? A good tale! I like Seenu.
I get a feel for him, yet he remains vague...I like that.
I also like Last Wish plothook. Its not an original one, but I have a soft spot in my heart for it. If I were a PC I would develop a strange attachment to that Old Woman, persevering through all to get the diamond to Sekkita! "Despite all my sins, in this I shall not fail! I will not let a dying woman down!" Then again, I would grow obsessed with the gem too, so umm... Go to Comment
Great idea! If they actually walk the ship on the shore I picture the ship leaning over pretty violently in order to allow the most amount of creatures to help move it. If only a few on the bottom can move it then they have the strength to do some real action in the oceon. Unless it is a flat bottom boat of course. But not only is the boat moving onto shore, I picture it rolling from one extreme to the next with the actions of the creatures sharing the load amongst those on both sides of the hull.
Forget doldrums, if these things find a rich source of food I bet they would stop a ship, even with a fare wind, dead in its track in order for to feed for awhile. Go to Comment
If you want to know which way is what, take down the sails and wait. I mirror manfred there, an experienced sailor would know that they can be used for navigation if the compass is ruined. Go to Comment