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Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-01 01:25 PM
Very well written as others have said, from her appearance to her ritual, to her throne room and everything in between is nicely described allowing for immediate, well-rendered visuals. I enjoyed the style of writing..."tooth and tail, water and smoke, task and burden, walls and net, torch and light"...very nice!

She's so well-rendered that you can either use the mythos and society she is enveloped in, or plop her down in any given campaign with minimal prep. Go to Comment
Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-02 03:27 PM
So who is Lesceline? She is a mystical monarch who uses lines such as "You dare threaten me?". I don't find her to be that clearly defined. We have Ichtalca, this woman with an interesting past and tragic birth and childhood. But then she becomes this "terrible and beautiful" queen who has people eviscerated and speaks in trite theatrical phrases. She has the memories of many life times, strikes others as very angry and then can be gentle and kind to her prisoners.
What do the gator folk mean to her?
What was Tergryn to her?
Is there an Ichtalca personality left or Nanni personality left or are they just the result of this fusion. Go to Comment
Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-02 03:34 PM
There is a lot of excellent information and detail here.

Let me see if I got her personality down as you intended to communicate it:

She is aloof.
She is impatient
She is proud
She is violent and cruel
First and foremost she is a problem solver.

Why didn't you just write this up as story? I think you would communicate a lot more and give us more of a feel if you really gave this to a true narrative, not this sort of cliff note summary.

But hey witch queen of the gator people: that is awesome. Go to Comment
Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-02 03:36 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
valadaar's comment on 2014-02-26 12:18 PM
An interesting character - though it seems her own decisions had very little impact upon her fate. Why did she so readily take up the queen-ship of the beings that slew her mother?

The setting is well developed and the writing good.

A great addition to Decathros!
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Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-02-28 06:57 PM
I really enjoyed this piece, with the plot hooks at the end providing a ready introduction into most fantasy campaigns.

It's a shame however that player characters encountering her will likely never come to realize her rich and fascinating background, at least not with any degree of accuracy.

A solid 5/5, the kind of NPC a GM can really get a handle on and have fun portraying!
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Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Aramax's comment on 2014-10-27 10:05 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
15/30 Bards
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Dozus's comment on 2008-02-05 09:50 PM
Twelve so far... Working on more! Go to Comment
15/30 Bards
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Murometz's comment on 2008-02-05 11:07 PM
'Fado' style bard

'Griot' style bard Go to Comment
15/30 Bards
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Longspeak's comment on 2014-04-18 02:34 PM
One I used in a game: "The Entertainer."

He's not a Bard. He's a Fighter. But he's always dreamt of being a Bard. He wields weapons he thinks a Bard should use. Quarterstaff, probably. He carries an instrument. He can play... some. He can sing... okay. He tells people he's an "entertainer." He isn't lying... except maybe to himself.
For best effect, stat out the best Fighter you can, being sure to neglect at least one and preferably two key Bard stats, then spend all secondary skills on "Bard" skills like singing and playing. Go to Comment
Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-02-06 04:59 AM
An enjoyable read, I like how the culture comes across with both exotic and fantastic elements but also things that are very familiar. I also liked the hodgepodge collision of multiple pantheons creating their own hybrid religions, and the non-standard roles of the medicine folk, being favored and outcaste depending on location and time of day.

The division of the magic into the green, blue, and red was an interesting concept, and I like it, and I can easily see pulling spell lists, or clerical domains out of it for making characters.

Good work. Go to Comment
Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-02-06 04:59 AM
An enjoyable read, I like how the culture comes across with both exotic and fantastic elements but also things that are very familiar. I also liked the hodgepodge collision of multiple pantheons creating their own hybrid religions, and the non-standard roles of the medicine folk, being favored and outcaste depending on location and time of day.

The division of the magic into the green, blue, and red was an interesting concept, and I like it, and I can easily see pulling spell lists, or clerical domains out of it for making characters.

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Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-05 08:38 PM


I think it succeeds in mirroring a voodoo society, in that cultural mish-mash way, with shrines, different types of magic, and the societal melding of gods, spirits and rituals.



I also like how the origin resonates. The Kanaarites want to be left alone in their swamps, but alas, they're "exotic", so must be infiltrated :)



Decathros continues to be enriched!

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Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-01 12:17 AM
I love it.

One of the greatest achievements in world building is a genuine and believable pidgin. Go to Comment
Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-12-09 10:42 AM
Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2014-02-06 08:28 AM
This is a great way to have a relationship between human and elf populations. The elves feel appropriately mysterious and alien - as it should be.

Great job! Go to Comment
Jampiri
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
caesar193's comment on 2014-02-06 11:25 AM
As was said before, you did a good job of making the elves and, to a lesser degree, Jampiri itself, be mysterious. The one thing that I noticed is that you talk about the gaging of medicine men, which I think should be gauging: this would be in the second paragraph of the Medicine Men of the Moors section,

Other than this, it was an excellent piece. It captured the air of Jampiri well, and I like how the elves just can't get rid of this idiot humans. Go to Comment
The Eye of Seenu
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
Dozus's comment on 2014-01-28 11:36 AM
Update: General cleaning up, typo editing, and the like. Go to Comment
The Eye of Seenu
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-28 11:45 AM


I love items that get the historical treatment as they switch hands from era to era.



And besides that....a gem that searches out other gems, or rather a gem-like race of ancient beyond ancient beings, unbeknownst to the owner. That's awesome! Some great detail and story-smithing here.

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The Eye of Seenu
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-09 10:00 PM
This really well done, reads like an encyclopedia entry, if an all knowing god wrote the encyclopedia....ah the citadel.

The idea that Gem has a personality and a goal is really interesting. I obviously didn't want to stay in the earth though, other wise why not just tell the miners to put it back? Did you imagine that it knows where it is going? What if it finds others of its kind? Could this type of mind control be how the ancient wars were once fought? How can it be destroyed? But I admire your choice to be purposefully vague and unclear about the nature of thing.

Also you jus sold a copy of Flynn's book. He should send you a commission. Go to Comment
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