Can't believe I haven't voted on this one before. This is one of the very first pieces I ever read on the site, and is undoubtedly one of the reasons I chose to join -- I was struck by the piece's quality and atmosphere, and was inspired to write some of my own. High time for another HoH! Go to Comment
When I first created this sub, it was part of a quest, but it was still "In Work." I guess I got the XP then, but since I just now promoted it to a full-fledged sub, it doesn't classify it as a quest sub, but it didn't change the XP.
At least, that's the only explanation I can come up with. Go to Comment
Only suggestion is to fix up the typos, I found a few:
Under History, 3rd paragraph- deemed "too" expensive;
Under Grand Order, I was under the impression that the proposition after the word "preside" should be "over" rather than "of";
Cuttlefish Order- "breathing" is spelled w/o the h
Coral Buckle- in the 1st half of the 1st sentence, you mean to say "Considered to be", right? the current phrasing is weird
Ray- should be "likened" rather than "liked"
Beyond Boshic- "fiery" spelled as firey
Other than that, I would say it's very structured and the details are very good. Go to Comment
They are a nicely done random monster for underground adventuring (and Dwarf annoyances). You did add some touches towards the end that made them a bit more that suprise/ pounce attackers of the lower depths. So they are a mysterious monster people race of the deep.
Still, they are underground Gnollish/ Orcish bags of hitpoints with suprise options.
In my mind, the comic image is a, well, comic-like image of them. I imagine them to look narrower, with thinner limbs and not such a large face, but something generally similar. They don't actually do any mining, they just exist in mineral-rich caves. Go to Comment
I like them. Nothing spectacular, but they just seem like "yeah, of course they exist" kind of creatures. I also feel the need to come with a scenario with Stalagmen now, entitled, "Stalag 17" :) Some dwarves are "captured" by a large group of particularly cruel Stalagmen and are kept as prisoners. The dwarven escape plots are always thwarted. They surmise that one of their own is secretly in cahoots with the Stalagmen...but which one? And why? Go to Comment
Pretty good take on a destruction of a soul. Never thought I would write a statement like that!
A little curious of the motivation of choosing this armless person amongst others unless it was specifically to try and destroy pure goodness and sacrifice and turn them into what he bacame. The conversation when he was brought in didn't take it that way so had me wonder exactly why him.
This really comes from an ancient Chinese novel. Imagine during the PCs' travels, they come to a place where the gender roles are completely reversed. What adventures will the PCs encounter in such a place?