Can't believe I haven't voted on this one before. This is one of the very first pieces I ever read on the site, and is undoubtedly one of the reasons I chose to join -- I was struck by the piece's quality and atmosphere, and was inspired to write some of my own. High time for another HoH! Go to Comment
When I first created this sub, it was part of a quest, but it was still "In Work." I guess I got the XP then, but since I just now promoted it to a full-fledged sub, it doesn't classify it as a quest sub, but it didn't change the XP.
At least, that's the only explanation I can come up with. Go to Comment
Only suggestion is to fix up the typos, I found a few:
Under History, 3rd paragraph- deemed "too" expensive;
Under Grand Order, I was under the impression that the proposition after the word "preside" should be "over" rather than "of";
Cuttlefish Order- "breathing" is spelled w/o the h
Coral Buckle- in the 1st half of the 1st sentence, you mean to say "Considered to be", right? the current phrasing is weird
Ray- should be "likened" rather than "liked"
Beyond Boshic- "fiery" spelled as firey
Other than that, I would say it's very structured and the details are very good. Go to Comment
They are a nicely done random monster for underground adventuring (and Dwarf annoyances). You did add some touches towards the end that made them a bit more that suprise/ pounce attackers of the lower depths. So they are a mysterious monster people race of the deep.
Still, they are underground Gnollish/ Orcish bags of hitpoints with suprise options.