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Temple of the Golden King and Silver Queen
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-18 06:57 PM
Effort obviously went into this submission and I enjoyed the myth of the temple. I still find it lacking though. I felt that the place was empty. Who goes there? Does anyone tend to the place? What can the PCs do here? And so forth.

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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-10-23 04:24 AM


Dossta, thank you for adding to this. It is now alive in a way that makes your first version(which was not bad) pale in comparison. I am voting again to reflect the changes.


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Murometz's comment on 2010-10-26 02:06 PM


'A  Sample Scene' stands out for me, and the rest is darn good too!



Could be intertwined into an over-arching plot or just used as is (as in the PCs just happen to come across the temple).



Good one! Congrats on 2nd place Quest win!

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axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:30 AM


Goddamn this is good.  I did not read the early drafts, but the one I read today (10/23/10) is exactly what I think a mock religion should  be.  Gamers often forget that most religions served a function in society.  People worshipped gods for a reason that effected their day to day life. This god (gods-and religion) does more than provide a supernatural support to the good people, but it also supports marriage and I assume by extension there are mid-wife types and others running around.  



 



Seriously great  write up, I can't say enough good things about it. 

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valadaar's comment on 2013-06-20 02:38 PM
This is excellent sub I missed first time around.Brilliantly done and it can so easily add avenues for adventure - both plot ideas are great!
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Kassy's comment on 2012-04-17 03:35 AM


When I noticed that this was the daily highlight I was sure that I'd read it before, which I have.



Cannot believe that I didn't comment or vote on it at the time.



It's a great sub and sadly there isn't really anything that I can add.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-25 05:35 PM


Really like the myth.  The temple is a useful location as well.


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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-15 09:24 AM
The myth does overshadow the temple a bit, but I wasn't sure if I had enough to break this into two separate submissions. I suppose I could expand the temple a bit more then resubmit the Legend as another post -- what do you think? Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-21 07:21 AM
Based on comments received from Michael and Pieh, I'm proceeding with a rewrite that will add more life and color to the temple proper. The legend will probably remain as part of this post for now, but might still be expanded to its own sub in the future. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-26 12:50 AM
Update: Added people, sample ritual, temple functions and plot hooks. Go to Comment
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herrozerro's comment on 2010-11-14 08:04 AM


Only Voted


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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-25 05:47 PM
Only voted, as everything I would say has already been said. 5/5 Go to Comment
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dustyjohnson's comment on 2013-06-22 02:10 PM
The level of intrigue this could build into my game is great. Thank you. Go to Comment
Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
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Pieh's comment on 2010-09-03 11:23 PM
Very nice. Great Quest submission. I could easily see these topping many wizard's staves.

I particularly enjoyed the parts about the captured Will O' Wisps and the brief reference of "lux mites" which sound like they would be very mundane in a magical world, but with many subtle uses. Go to Comment
Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
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EchoMirage's comment on 2010-09-07 06:51 AM
I'd like a more original origin story, with, say, a tale of inspiration, more poetic than "I needed it, I made it".

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Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-09-03 08:27 PM
I love this submission. What happens if an orb breaks? Go to Comment
Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
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Cheka Man's comment on 2014-07-31 04:29 PM
I want to buy these orbs lol. Go to Comment
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Chaosmark's comment on 2010-09-05 12:48 PM
You beat me to this idea, and man am I glad you did! I was considering something roughly akin to this as a sidenote submission to enhance my own quest idea, but your implementation is much more detailed and thought out than my own. Kudos! Go to Comment
Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
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axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 12:10 PM


I found this to be a great post, I really like when supernatural items have almost mundane or utilitarian slant.  Very every uber-item, when should have five or six of these easy to use magic items that serve the mechanics of magic first and foremost.  



 



What bumps this up to a sweet post for me is the culturally and historical suggestive style of writing.  With this one piece of materiall culture you describe a much larger world. Well done.  


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valadaar's comment on 2010-09-06 06:21 PM
A nice item - well done and welcome to Strolens!

Transform this into a material, and it is readily used in Steampunk for lighting.

Is there expected to be an upper end on it's power? If you were to use it in 1st Edition D&D and temporarily transport it to the plane of Radiance, could you store 8 hours of that type of power?

Or is it limited to energies of mortal experience :)
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