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Mirror of the Star Children
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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-09-15 09:25 PM
5/5-it's a pretty and useful item. Go to Comment
Mirror of the Star Children
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Chaosmark's comment on 2012-03-10 08:33 PM


I'm absolutely captivated by this submission. I'm not sure exactly why, but it seems like the perfect combination of elements. Very nicely done.


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Mirror of the Star Children
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axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 12:01 PM


Sounds exactly like the Upright Citizens Brigades "Bucket of Truth" skits only not funny.  In fact



"Drawing near the Mirror, you can almost hear the sound of children's laughter and it brings great joy to those who view it.  At night the colors calm and begin to shimmer like the aurora, as seen in only the coldest northern climes.  Gazing at the swirling aurora will instill the viewer with a sense of profound peace, as if wrapped in a mother's embrace.  "



 



that sounds down right unnerving. 



 

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Mirror of the Star Children
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valadaar's comment on 2014-01-15 08:35 AM
This item makes perfect sense. To use it for paladin's vigils is a great idea.

Nicely done! Come back Dossta! Go to Comment
Mirror of the Star Children
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-17 10:38 AM
Thanks, man. Bouncing these things off each other has been a lot of fun, and there is so much left in this world to flesh out. We should probably consider making a codex for all of this stuff at some point. Go to Comment
Mirror of the Star Children
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-17 10:40 AM
I've been rolling a quest line around in my head that involves the lost fragments, but wasn't ready to post it yet. I may add it to this post if I don't have time to flesh it out properly, but it will hopefully end up being its own submission. I'll let you know when it's done. Go to Comment
Temple of the Golden King and Silver Queen
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Pieh's comment on 2010-09-13 06:23 PM
Awesome! Such a great creation myth, and I'm glad I could help inspire it. I feel like the myth overshadows the temple itself but they have been intertwined in an awesome way. The temple mimicking the light as it was when they were together is just great. Good work. Go to Comment
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Pieh's comment on 2010-09-15 12:33 PM
I think expanding the temple and its typical staff, roles around the church, would be good. Maybe describe the outside appearance as well.

As for the Myth, I think describing the examples given by the faith and some of the church hierarchy would be a good start. If you want/need any help, let me know. Go to Comment
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Pieh's comment on 2010-10-01 10:17 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Pieh's comment on 2012-04-17 03:25 PM


Reread it, as it is the Daily Highlight, and it's still a wonderful piece. It really feels alive and believable (for a fantasy setting). The sample scene is great, especially the dialogues between Illuminator and Illuminatress. It doesn't need any more as far as expanding the current content, what is there is complete. I do think more could be created around the church and its religon, as we have seen with the items associated, but it doesn't need more at all.



Great work, Dossta. Never stop writing.


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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-09-13 08:15 PM
That myth is really sweet. 5/5 Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-18 06:57 PM
Effort obviously went into this submission and I enjoyed the myth of the temple. I still find it lacking though. I felt that the place was empty. Who goes there? Does anyone tend to the place? What can the PCs do here? And so forth.

For me this a solid idea with a lot of promise. Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-10-23 04:24 AM


Dossta, thank you for adding to this. It is now alive in a way that makes your first version(which was not bad) pale in comparison. I am voting again to reflect the changes.


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Murometz's comment on 2010-10-26 02:06 PM


'A  Sample Scene' stands out for me, and the rest is darn good too!



Could be intertwined into an over-arching plot or just used as is (as in the PCs just happen to come across the temple).



Good one! Congrats on 2nd place Quest win!

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axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:30 AM


Goddamn this is good.  I did not read the early drafts, but the one I read today (10/23/10) is exactly what I think a mock religion should  be.  Gamers often forget that most religions served a function in society.  People worshipped gods for a reason that effected their day to day life. This god (gods-and religion) does more than provide a supernatural support to the good people, but it also supports marriage and I assume by extension there are mid-wife types and others running around.  



 



Seriously great  write up, I can't say enough good things about it. 

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valadaar's comment on 2013-06-20 02:38 PM
This is excellent sub I missed first time around.Brilliantly done and it can so easily add avenues for adventure - both plot ideas are great!
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Kassy's comment on 2012-04-17 03:35 AM


When I noticed that this was the daily highlight I was sure that I'd read it before, which I have.



Cannot believe that I didn't comment or vote on it at the time.



It's a great sub and sadly there isn't really anything that I can add.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-25 05:35 PM


Really like the myth.  The temple is a useful location as well.


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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-15 09:24 AM
The myth does overshadow the temple a bit, but I wasn't sure if I had enough to break this into two separate submissions. I suppose I could expand the temple a bit more then resubmit the Legend as another post -- what do you think? Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-21 07:21 AM
Based on comments received from Michael and Pieh, I'm proceeding with a rewrite that will add more life and color to the temple proper. The legend will probably remain as part of this post for now, but might still be expanded to its own sub in the future. Go to Comment
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