Reread it, as it is the Daily Highlight, and it's still a wonderful piece. It really feels alive and believable (for a fantasy setting). The sample scene is great, especially the dialogues between Illuminator and Illuminatress. It doesn't need any more as far as expanding the current content, what is there is complete. I do think more could be created around the church and its religon, as we have seen with the items associated, but it doesn't need more at all.
Great work, Dossta. Never stop writing.
Goddamn this is good. I did not read the early drafts, but the one I read today (10/23/10) is exactly what I think a mock religion should be. Gamers often forget that most religions served a function in society. People worshipped gods for a reason that effected their day to day life. This god (gods-and religion) does more than provide a supernatural support to the good people, but it also supports marriage and I assume by extension there are mid-wife types and others running around.
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Seriously great write up, I can't say enough good things about it.