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EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 02:12 PM


Most evil and devious; my only objection are the names of existing Nordic gods - or rather, a raven in once case, a goddess in the other.


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Murometz's comment on 2011-02-09 10:44 AM


I have to second everyone who mentioned the great presentation. Both entertaining and informative.



The legend behind them, the healing manual excerpts, the life-cycle and habits, and the great attention to detail takes this up a notch!



And of course, very nice use of the deaths-head moth images!


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valadaar's comment on 2013-02-27 12:54 PM
This is really great - such a nasty little threat. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2010-12-23 12:00 PM


I really love the presentation and how the facts mix with the narratives to form a compelling story. As others have said it's well done, and has a lot of usefulness without being overpowered.



If one could obtain a blood sample of their intended target, these creatures could make for an effective assassination repertory tool as well. (Let the bugs find and tear apart the targets mind, then follow up  later with a killing blow against the helpless victim.)


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Kassy's comment on 2012-04-24 12:16 PM


There isn't anything that I can say that hasn't already been said.



This will be added to my favourites. (How to I organise my favourites?)



5/5


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sverigesson's comment on 2010-11-10 05:20 AM
I think this is excellent, and as I'm a huge fan of Norse mythology, the homemade myth origin of these moths is very compelling. Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-09 04:43 PM


A good quality sub overall, with a coherent backstory. I also quite like the interweaving b/w the narrative story and the scientific/medical excerpts.


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slartibartfast's comment on 2010-11-10 09:08 AM


Splendid job!  A detailed, yet enthralling account of a horrific creature that has numerous applications in a campaign setting; I couldn't find a single thing I didn't like about this.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-12 12:45 PM


Neat idea.  Memory loss is a very interesting tool.  Anyone who's watched 'Regarding Henry', 'Total Recall', 'Push', 'The Majestic', etc. knows that whole stories can be based on someone getting amnesia.  Specifically if used on a main character (or PC).  I do have a few questions about the moths in your submission.  When confronting their creator, the larvae appear to have an attack capacity.  Somehow they lunge off of the mortal they start chowing down on the deity.  Yet later, they sound more like a torture device used by jailer priests. Easily controlled.  I understand that they were changed after their attack on the deity, but I saw the change as being from complete memory loss to more of a selective amnesia.  Would you care to explain the discrepancy?  And finally, how is it a deity was having a hard time killing a batch of moths?  I do like the irony of the story, but why couldn't he handle the situation much better, where a mortal with a fly swatter, or dare I say it, a can of bug spray,  would have kicked butt?  Just a few thoughts in reconciling the story.  Overall I liked it.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-14 03:44 PM
It works well enough for me. Kryptonite? Sure. Also people in love do stupid things... I dare say it's the same for a deity. Where he probably should have done an experiment on another creature with some of his underlings controlling the test, clearly, he was desperate and lacking in judgement. Like I said earlier, I like the myth and the 'Frankenstein' effect, told in a poetic/legendary way. I recommend keeping it with a little cleanup.

I think one other nice touch would be some kind of a global effect that took place (or allegedly took place) when the god of memory lost his memory.

Thats all. I like the feedback process when it is used well. Which I see happening here.

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Nafar's comment on 2010-11-13 04:47 PM


woo, thats scary. especially if they took the memories about what happened to you.


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olontur's comment on 2010-11-09 08:48 PM


Enjoyed it a lot!



I wouldn't think this is the best way to collect soldiers for a cause, though, as it would require extreme patience and care. But for more powerful and worthwhile individuals, like the PCs... *evil laughter*


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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-18 10:09 AM
I waffled over what to name the deities when I first did this piece. Like sverigesson, I really love Norse mythology, so I kind of just went with it. Upon reflection, however, I don't want to misrepresent an existing mythology -- especially not one for which I have such high regard. Changed the names to something more neutral. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-09 04:03 PM


This is my first lifeform, and is meant for the Monsters quest.  Thanks for reading!


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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-10 01:26 PM
That was exactly the intention I had when writing this, but I may have obscured it a bit. When I write about the party of "mercenaries" that was captured, I was thinking "adventuring party", but didn't think that Brother Jonas would use that language.

You're right that this method requires extreme care -- just trying to mindwipe a wizard without removing years worth of study would require that they keep the subject extremely focused on only the "right" sort of memory. Much more of an art than a science.

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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-10 01:45 PM


Some (unscrupulous) governments practice selective use of memory moths on state enemies (usually before banishment).  Memory eradication may even extend to some individuals they wish to protect, such as retired spies and other intelligence officers.  Usage of the larvae in this way is generally easier, as the retired officer often understands the necessity and will willingly self-direct their thoughts to all aspects of their service.  They will often remember most of the mundane details of these years, including their cover job, but not the intrigue.


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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-13 10:55 AM
Huh. >.> . . . <.< . . . I can fix this.

"When Munnin aided Hel in altering the moths, he unwittingly unleashed his own Achilles Heel on the world -- his Kryptonite, if you will. Being the living personification of memory, Munnin would be especially vulnerable to the moth's attack ( as they cause the "death of memory"). So, while any other deity would have little problem with killing/disabling the moths, Munnin would be in serious trouble.

With this in mind, let's return to the story. When Munnin saw what was happening to Hilde's memories, my guess is that he would first try picking the moths off with his hands, especially if he was panicked and had not yet guessed at the danger. Once touching Munnin, the moths would begin to paralyze him, as they do with all of their victims. Being a god, Munnin would have had a little time to ensure Hilde's safety before losing his ability to move. But, as the moths were able to weaken Munnin so effectively, he could only make limited changes before succumbing to paralysis.

He made two changes to the moths -- keying them to the one who's blood they were exposed to (thus ensuring that they could be handled safely by anyone but the intended victim). He also altered their appetites slightly, making it possible for him to retain a part of himself."

Redgre, if this convinces you then I will edit it into the main submission. If not, I would appreciate some input on how to fix this. If that is getting rid of the creation myth altogether, then I will do that, but I'd much rather make it work.

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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-17 06:31 PM
Update: Changed the names of the gods, and tidied up the creation myth following Redgre's advice. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2012-04-24 09:46 AM
Thanks for the HOH, Strolen :) Go to Comment
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herrozerro's comment on 2010-11-10 03:17 PM


Awesome!


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