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The Singing Wood
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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-16 04:59 PM


Well done.  I enjoyed exploring this enchanted location with it's musical denizens.  It would be a place one would encounter faeries if they exist in your world.  My only concern is that the rich depth of detail would be lost on all but the most attentive GMs and players.  Definitely a musical background and the right soundtrack would definitely help with mood and atmosphere etc.  Of course if you  were to use this as source material for a book, I'm sure the reader would be as impressed as we your fellow Strolenites are.  All in all a great submission.


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The Singing Wood
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olontur's comment on 2010-11-14 05:19 PM


Makes me feel like playing Zelda...


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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-14 01:41 PM
Update: Please feel free to add ideas to this list, as I'm sure there are many other musical flora and fauna that could find a home here. If there are any existing submissions that fit, I would consider making this into a codex. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-15 01:14 PM
Update: Changing this to a codex. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2010-11-22 02:28 PM


@Redgre & Pieh:



I admit that I probably got a bit carried away when detailing this place.  I understand what you mean about it being somewhat purposeless, but am at a loss for how to fix it at this time -- my creative muse is fickle.  If either of you could make some suggestions to help me significantly improve this piece, I would be happy to credit you.



In reality, this piece was intended as background for a race of people that I haven't finished yet and was planning to submit later.  Perhaps I will add them here after all . . .  As for novel writing; I'd like to one day, so thanks for the encouragement. =)

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Memory Moths
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Strolen's comment on 2010-11-10 01:20 PM


I loved the narrative used to explain what was going on. As others did, I liked the excerpts that went a little deeper than the narrative.



Didn't see it mentioned but I would assume that this profession would be extremely secret. If people knew that many of the church's army were mindwiped I am guessing that it wouldn't go over too well. Was thinking a fun thought would be for them to "capture" somebody with a unique skill and the location he would be used there would be a few that would recognize him. They would be forced to kill off those that know them to keep their usage of him a secret. Wandering thoughts which means I really like the post as it spins ideas!


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Strolen's comment on 2011-02-20 09:08 AM


Congrats on Second Place in the Monstrous Monsters Quest!!


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Strolen's comment on 2012-04-23 12:44 PM


Still really like this one!


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Pieh's comment on 2010-11-09 09:57 PM


Very nice work, Dossta. This submission combines three interesting styles of writing. It provides a chilling narrative,a twisted fairy-tale, and a scientific examination. I think the combination was very effective at leaving very few questions to be asked. At the core of the idea, memory-eating moths, I don't like it. But the presentation and level of detail given counts for a lot, and begs to be used. Good job.


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Scrasamax's comment on 2010-11-16 08:33 AM


Wow. Just Wow


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EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 02:12 PM


Most evil and devious; my only objection are the names of existing Nordic gods - or rather, a raven in once case, a goddess in the other.


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Murometz's comment on 2011-02-09 10:44 AM


I have to second everyone who mentioned the great presentation. Both entertaining and informative.



The legend behind them, the healing manual excerpts, the life-cycle and habits, and the great attention to detail takes this up a notch!



And of course, very nice use of the deaths-head moth images!


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valadaar's comment on 2013-02-27 12:54 PM
This is really great - such a nasty little threat. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2010-12-23 12:00 PM


I really love the presentation and how the facts mix with the narratives to form a compelling story. As others have said it's well done, and has a lot of usefulness without being overpowered.



If one could obtain a blood sample of their intended target, these creatures could make for an effective assassination repertory tool as well. (Let the bugs find and tear apart the targets mind, then follow up  later with a killing blow against the helpless victim.)


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Kassy's comment on 2012-04-24 12:16 PM


There isn't anything that I can say that hasn't already been said.



This will be added to my favourites. (How to I organise my favourites?)



5/5


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sverigesson's comment on 2010-11-10 05:20 AM
I think this is excellent, and as I'm a huge fan of Norse mythology, the homemade myth origin of these moths is very compelling. Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-09 04:43 PM


A good quality sub overall, with a coherent backstory. I also quite like the interweaving b/w the narrative story and the scientific/medical excerpts.


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slartibartfast's comment on 2010-11-10 09:08 AM


Splendid job!  A detailed, yet enthralling account of a horrific creature that has numerous applications in a campaign setting; I couldn't find a single thing I didn't like about this.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-12 12:45 PM


Neat idea.  Memory loss is a very interesting tool.  Anyone who's watched 'Regarding Henry', 'Total Recall', 'Push', 'The Majestic', etc. knows that whole stories can be based on someone getting amnesia.  Specifically if used on a main character (or PC).  I do have a few questions about the moths in your submission.  When confronting their creator, the larvae appear to have an attack capacity.  Somehow they lunge off of the mortal they start chowing down on the deity.  Yet later, they sound more like a torture device used by jailer priests. Easily controlled.  I understand that they were changed after their attack on the deity, but I saw the change as being from complete memory loss to more of a selective amnesia.  Would you care to explain the discrepancy?  And finally, how is it a deity was having a hard time killing a batch of moths?  I do like the irony of the story, but why couldn't he handle the situation much better, where a mortal with a fly swatter, or dare I say it, a can of bug spray,  would have kicked butt?  Just a few thoughts in reconciling the story.  Overall I liked it.


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Redgre's comment on 2010-11-14 03:44 PM
It works well enough for me. Kryptonite? Sure. Also people in love do stupid things... I dare say it's the same for a deity. Where he probably should have done an experiment on another creature with some of his underlings controlling the test, clearly, he was desperate and lacking in judgement. Like I said earlier, I like the myth and the 'Frankenstein' effect, told in a poetic/legendary way. I recommend keeping it with a little cleanup.

I think one other nice touch would be some kind of a global effect that took place (or allegedly took place) when the god of memory lost his memory.

Thats all. I like the feedback process when it is used well. Which I see happening here.

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