Reminds me of a tale by... Gaiman, methinks. Anyways, exceedingly well written. The sole objection is that the Judge's punishments are a little literal.
You might want to edit out a few mistakes, such as the second plot hook lacking "hero" in the first line (A great ... has been etc.)
A well-deserved 5, I'd say.
A well written, nicely described hell.
It is highly logical, almost a bureaucratic, hell. I can envision you creating special locations within this hell, and I can also imagine several plotslines which involve this location.
All in all, a fine Hell.
A most excellent submission - my only concern is the same as Echo's. As time has gone on, my own vision of justice has leaned a little against eye-for-eye punishments. Frankly, I think that is too easy. For a torturer to simply need to be tortured in turn ... does not completly work for me. The focus on physical punishments also seems to strong.
That said, tops marks from me!
Well written and organized. Perfect balancing of a life against it's deeds. Very emotional and rational. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. However, applying it in a gaming session, seems to escape me. The lasting consequences of any choice from the plot hooks seems trivial. What value is there in helping a soul to move on? What are the consequences of interfereing in some other way? Just a few thoughts on the matter.
31-In Love (borrowed from Shrek.)
A dragon has fallen in love with a PC, siezes him or her in it's claws and takes the PC to it's mountain cave where it tries to seduce him or her.If refused it might eat the love interest who spurned it, otherwise it will dress him/her in jewels from it's hoard, sing ect.It's up to the GM/PCs how sexual it becomes.