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Silverbreath
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bookwormwen's comment on 2012-06-26 03:48 PM
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Silverbreath
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rickster's comment on 2013-05-10 08:05 PM
The idea of a sacrifice is a good one. Perhaps it would be too restrictive to require that the prize ram would have to be given to the original dragon (or maybe by now its offpring.).

If that dragon were slain, would the item stop working? Perhaps a quest to find the dragon's cousin be mounted? Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-11-14 11:23 AM
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The Thunder Sphere
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-11-08 12:13 PM


A shocking submission, and very orginal, the most orginal way of shooting lightning bolts I've ever seen. I would not want someone wearing this to come too close to my computer.


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The Thunder Sphere
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-11-11 08:38 PM


I want this to win the Quest.


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The Thunder Sphere
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Phaidros's comment on 2014-03-18 06:41 PM
Good item, I would only like some more on that history, with both heroes and villain (ab)using the Sphere. And who made this? Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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Chaosmark's comment on 2011-11-14 08:46 PM
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The Thunder Sphere
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Murometz's comment on 2012-06-26 10:15 AM
I just love the image of someone donning these seeming "shackles", as well as the image of someone drawing every last lightning bolt from a monstrous thunderstorm, (with hordes of stunned, wide-eyed onlookers nearby), as well as the image of an elecrical overload, and the consequent, disastrous discharges. Boy, thats a lot of images :) Like the Twist too! Also, what d_d said. Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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dark_dragon's comment on 2011-12-01 04:22 AM


I like those! I would totally see this being a campaign side-track, ith the five rings separated across the kingdom, to be reunited by the plucky PCs before taking on the big bad or going up the mountain to query the trhunder god. 



Good work Dossta! 


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The Thunder Sphere
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Morte's comment on 2013-01-15 04:21 AM
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The Thunder Sphere
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Redgre's comment on 2011-11-08 07:10 PM


I really like the overall idea and concept, reminicent of the old Spiderman villian, Electro.  However, the thing I'm having a hard time wrapping my mind around is how one 'wears' this five link chain.  It seems awkward at best.  It reminds me of full body shackles on an inmate, with perhaps less flexibility.  I've read it a few times now and I still get stuck on this.  Am I missing something?


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The Thunder Sphere
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Dossta's comment on 2011-11-08 04:59 PM
Update: Broke the name into two parts, 'cause I liked it better that way. Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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Dossta's comment on 2011-11-08 10:22 PM
That's explained in the last paragraph, though perhaps I should move it up or reword it somehow for clarity. The recipient of this item simply has to slide a hand (or foot) through the appropriate ring, and it will detach itself from the others and resize itself to fit him. If he takes the rings off at any time, they will be attracted to each other and automatically link back together. Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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Dossta's comment on 2011-11-12 12:29 AM
Thanks, Cheka. I'm flattered :) Go to Comment
The Thunder Sphere
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Wizard of Justice's comment on 2014-08-02 03:58 AM
This item really captured my imagination and is removed from the typical idea of 'armour'.
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Katumus
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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-08-17 07:35 PM
I approve. Well written and engaging I found myself easily imagining this cold and just hell. As for using it in a game, there is the rare one off game or single person session where they have the near death experience and get a taste of what lies beyond. There is also the Herculean task of voyaging to thei he'll to find the souls of great heroes trapped by their own guilt so that they can be reborn for a coming time of trials and conflict in the world. Go to Comment
Katumus
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-08-18 04:23 AM


Reminds me of a tale by... Gaiman, methinks. Anyways, exceedingly well written. The sole objection is that the Judge's punishments are a little literal.



You might want to edit out a few mistakes, such as the second plot hook lacking "hero" in the first line (A great ... has been etc.)



Echo likes.



A well-deserved 5, I'd say.


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Katumus
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-08-16 01:39 PM


Very well,hellish. Devishly good. 5/5


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Katumus
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2011-08-11 06:29 PM


A well written, nicely described hell.



It is highly logical, almost a bureaucratic, hell. I can envision you creating special locations within this hell, and I can also imagine several plotslines which involve this location. 



All in all, a fine Hell.


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Katumus
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valadaar's comment on 2011-08-21 08:02 PM


A most excellent submission - my only concern is the same as Echo's. As time has gone on, my own vision of justice has leaned a little against eye-for-eye punishments. Frankly, I think that is too easy. For a torturer to simply need to be tortured in turn ... does not completly work for me.  The focus on physical punishments also seems to strong.  



 



That said, tops marks from me!


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