I realize it wasn't stated but if I were to use this I would think of a strong, gale force wind that kept flying creatures other than the dragon from flying above the maze. Possibly a darkened cloud that is always present that strikes would be flyers and cheaters out of the sky with lightning, tornados, and the like. Go to Comment
This is horribly horribly good, each once could-should be a short story. In fact if you hadn't been published, i would suggest expanding on this, a collection of short stories about you ten dragons. You are wasting this on this site. You cover, sci-fi, steam punk, modern fantasy, crime fiction, classic high fantasy and so on. Really I think you could do a lot with this, i would buy the book, and if I was publisher I would commission this based on the this treatment. Thank you for writing this. Seriously talk to illustrator this would make a great comic as well.
I dig the Zepplin, and the pawnshop based on their literal use of dragons and scenery. The last three, really change tones, you move away form the giant powerful magical beasts and into other realizations of the dragon mythos. Damn you this is good, I would join the dragon guild but I am not sure I could keep up. Go to Comment
Update: This was originally going to be a 30, but it got too darn long. I'll eventually figure out if I should post the rest in subsequent submissions, or just update this one. Doll House idea inspired by this: http://www.msichicago.org/whats-here/exhibits/fairycastle/ Go to Comment
I was actually hoping it could be judged as a complete submission right now. The word count is already pretty high up there, and making someone slog through 30 of these in one go seemed a bit sadistic :P Go to Comment
You flatter me, sir. I would very much like to get published one day, but haven't figured out what I want to write yet -- gaming stuff or novels/stories. Comments like this are very encouraging, so thank you for taking the time to read my work. :) Go to Comment
This should be a cartography guild sub, not the dumb strolenatis! Its got the whole flavor of cartography- maps, Here There Be Dragon signs, and maps. Anyway, great 10. One question- for the Labyrinth, why couldn't somehow just fly over the maze? The simplest thing would be to put a ceiling on it, but you said that people could see the glint of the gold, which means there's a hole in the ceiling. You could have the dragon kill the "cheaters," but for me that doesn't match the dragon's- someone who spent the time to make a giant maze- character and personality. Go to Comment
I too like the way it reproduces.
But something that ravages an already ravaged wasteland really does not carry the same threat of destruction as something that comes out to disrupt the hubris of peace and prosperity. The real story would start when the hellebabies make land fall in Sweden or some other country that sat out the war. I like the idea, but this doesn't seem to be the whole story. Go to Comment