I doubt that I would have included most of that last paragraph, but I understand where you're coming from Silveressa.
Yes, dead-tree versions of pretty much anything are woefully expensive (for me).
The idea came to me because I've had to make do with only my benefits after my legs were forfeit. Keeping on top of the rent, paying the gas, water and electricity bills, buying food, clothing, etc.. It all mounts up and by the end of the day I'm left with very little. It takes me a while to save up to buy things. Saving up to buy my iPad took me well over a year, even then I could only buy the cheapest version.
I am able to save maybe $40-50 a month. After all everyday expenses have been paid. Then there a things such as spending a night with friends etc.. Go to Comment
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Some grammar and spelling issues, but it's not a bad idea. In a religion that allows for deathbed conversions, why not provoke them, instead of waiting for them to happen? Go to Comment
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Associating dragons with the Easter Bunny does feel a little silly. IMHO, your writing is solid, but you talk in generalizations. I like hearing names, and specific events. If you personalized the dragons or the speaker a little more, I think the story would have a better place to stand. If the story begins with a homeless man covered in holiday symbols throwing money back at the listener and saying, "I don't want your money! I just want you to listen!" then I have something to visualize when I'm reading the rest. I'm not a fan of your conjoined paragraphs, either. Enough criticism. Dionysus, you have some really great ideas in here.
What if magic depended on ignorance of physical laws to make it work? As soon as a wizard learns about combustion and convection, he can't cast fireballs anymore. A physics class would stunt him, magically. There was a time when we had no idea what caused thunderstorms, and I'm sure there are people that will proclaim that ignorance is power. Some backwards-minded religious folks still say that to this day.
It kind of reminds me of the Heisenberg Uncertainty Principle, in a way.
Why doesn't it work backwards? There are some parts of the world that are full of people who see spirits in stones and ghosts in the moon. Do their dragons disappear as soon as the scientists come?
There's another idea here: that physical laws can be democratic instead of absolute. Like 40K orks. But now I'm rambling. Keep posting!
That was entertaining, and surprisingly subtle. You lay on the colloquialisms a bit thick at the end -- and the voice begins to distract from the content -- but other than that, it was a very enjoyable read. Kudos. Go to Comment
You say the voice distracts from the content a little too much.
I have read and re-read this many times, both in my head and out loud. I couldn't detect anything, but maybe that's because I'm used to the way I think and speak.
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For a one shot alien invasion adventure this would make for an amusing aside cut scene to play on the characters, and raising the question of how they would treat the strippers dressed in cat suits and kids in costumes?
"They seemed kitten enough to me, and these small one are apparently "hello kitties" apparently clothed as such to celebrate one of their leaders birthdays, a mr. Halloween I believe it was sir." Go to Comment
Reminds me of "They're Made Out of Meat" by Terry Bisson. Cute little story, you got there, Dionysus. Much like a kitten. Speaking of which, the aliens really should have brought more kittens. The best line:
Nothing in the universe is cuter than baby Xibillin. Go to Comment
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Yes, dead-tree versions of pretty much anything are woefully expensive (for me).
The idea came to me because I've had to make do with only my benefits after my legs were forfeit. Keeping on top of the rent, paying the gas, water and electricity bills, buying food, clothing, etc.. It all mounts up and by the end of the day I'm left with very little. It takes me a while to save up to buy things. Saving up to buy my iPad took me well over a year, even then I could only buy the cheapest version.
I am able to save maybe $40-50 a month. After all everyday expenses have been paid. Then there a things such as spending a night with friends etc.. Go to Comment