And so did an anarchist come to embrace the rule over others. A strange story with a few weak places, but it has something interesting in it. Oh, and you could link in the various submissions used. Go to Comment

Actually I hate both names... Mently Wave sucks and so does Peto Specimen. Mantle Wave is fine to me. But that's immaterial.
Very much like it, interesting ideas. Good solid stuff. Go to Comment

Good but...ewwwwww Go to Comment

Very interesting, and nicely done. However, I'm not quite understanding how Axtrami relates to this as anything more than just a name of a semi-deity who saved someone. Axtrami seemed to have more to him than just that, and perhaps you intended to include it, but I'm not seeing it. Go to Comment

A very interesting revolutionary. Only two real complaints: 1) the name Mently Wave does absolutely nothing for me, and 2) a few grammatical errors/awkward sentences in the post. The concept, however, is fascinating. Good work. Go to Comment

Can his name be ANYTHING other than Peto Specimen? please? :)

I do however, peculiar as it may be, like the name Mently Wave, moreso than Mantle Wave.

Anyway, on to the actual submission! An intriguing tale and an interesting NPC. A 'strange' story, manfred points out, and I concur. It has some intriguing elements. Good work! Go to Comment

What bumps this up for me is the contradictions and problems that the NPC and his current situation presents.  He is a revolutionary and rebel who has found himself a leader.  We need more NP characters like this one.  Many NPCs "make sense" and would be stable and self contained until PCs are thrown into the mix. This NPC is on an unstainable path.  This NPC has a story cause you know he can't last.  Also the phyiscal details are over the top and extreme.  These are kind of physical details that help a spoken word medium like roleplaying.  

 

I think there some broken links and formatting issues that make the post a little incomplete. 

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Definately an interesting submissions, but I'm not sure about the name
'Specimen'. It reminds me of what they ask you for at the hospital.

Actually, I'm sure about the name - I hate it. Otherwise an excellent post! Go to Comment

Yeah, I'm having real trouble with his name. I want his original name (Mently Wave) to be really boring, but then he ditches it for a better one. I haven't thought of one yet. Go to Comment

I have a few inklings of what I think Axtrami wants to do, but I wanted to leave it mostly at the discretion of the person who is using the submission. Go to Comment

Updated: I wanted to address all the comments posted. I thought of a name, tried to correct grammar mistakes, and fleshed out the story a bit. (no pun intended) Go to Comment

You know, even melting and recasting coins is not an 'easy' countermeasure.

This is one of those items you should be VERY CAREFUL of adding to your game world. As MoonHunter has shown above, the chain of events that are likely to follow its invention has massive consequences. The moral of the story: be careful when playing with magic. :) Go to Comment

I don't know why you would think this would have a nominal net effect on the world. This enchantment (and the chain of events it would unleash) would radically change the world. The action and response lag of these events would be years... so those years would require faster applications.

It now makes coinage dangerous, so other options (like cheques and letters of credit) would be used to be "safe". Nobody would let anyone give them coins (or even possibly charmed item). Thus only the "rich" would have safe money. Everyone else would have to take their chances that an enchanted coin might be out there.

This inability to take coin would create a banking system. They would keep the coin and letters of credit/ cheques would be used. Now the rich would start, then the guildsmen they traded with. Eventually all but the poorest would have bank accounts. Banks then take their money from transaction fees and capital investments of money in their trust.

You would then spawn early corporations and bank exchanges. You would throw your world towards Modernity, even if it has deeply feudal roots.

The creation of "detection plates", like the iron plates that touching of all coins to... to detect/ destroy fairy/ glamoured coins, would eventually be created. The price of safely doing business would be the cost of said plate. If it was not dirt cheap, it would focus safe commerace into the hands of a few (so each market would have a "check out stand" with the detection plate).

Once the other kinds of snakes were created, then anti-magic wards would need to be invented to block the snakes. The presence of these charms would make magic in urban and town areas, nearly impossible. Sure an individual one would not be bad, but overlapping upon overlapping ones would make it near impossible to cast. Thus magic users would be limited by their own counter spelling (which they originally made money selling to people).

Note: You should find the Lord Darcy series. They make some interesting and logical points about magic.

So the counter magic backlash would come by the poor and those forced out of safe transations. They would hate magic users for unleashing this upon the people. They would be hunted down, hung, and burned. Sure their spells might make them dangerous, but they have to sleep. If they have to spend so much of their time on safety spells, they will have preciously little other magic to spend on doing other things.

Possession of snake spells would become illegal, a law enforced. Then all dangerous magics would outlawed.. first the enchantment then the spells. Then all other magics. So then all magics would either be in the hands of the government (for your own protection) OR outlawed entirely. So no more magic items allowed in the free hands.

In short, the presence of this spell will radically change your world. Go to Comment

While this sub has a few problems, like the paragraphs needing spaces between them, it is a very novel idea! The first thing that actually popped into my mind was gold coins that were minted in magic using countries or by mages themselves would have a serpent embossed one side of the coin. Kind of a reminder of the Golden Snake spell, and of their own power. Feel free to insert stuff about snakes being symbolic of wisdom. I like the idea of the spell being so popular, and then abused, and have a rippling effect through the realm. Go to Comment

I really like the backstory. Go to Comment

BUMP-this is a great item. Go to Comment

Yeah, what val said should be right. Unless if the enchantment stays with it, so you get an ingot snake, 50 feet long and capable of simly crushing someone. Go to Comment

Only voted Go to Comment

Well, many anti-magic spells are area-affecting, and detect magic spells can be used to differentiate between enchanted and non-enhanted coins (depending on game system, of course).

Also, the cost of the spell has to be balanced by it's effect.

Now, an easy countermeasure for theves would be to simply melt suspect coins and recast them.
No magic required.

An interesting idea. Go to Comment

I can't find the submission, but I was inspired by one regarding a copper wyrm, or something along those lines. Go to Comment