This has the "too weird to not be real" flair to it. Add the Mercenary freetext, as they belong there.
Insanity, mercs, and a religion gone wild... now that is a nice combination. The cannibalism is a bit of a gross out factor, but can be accepted if you go for the gritinness of a setting. (It might have been only one case, or actually an invented rumour to damage their credibility - and the mad have smartly taken it up as a name!)
It appears that there is some skilled person leading these madmen - one has to wonder how they would react if the Prophet would be really gone; and how insane they actually are.
An okay submission, and I liked the dark irony, that a place to be conquered has been already taken over by the very religion that declares it heretical; sounds like genuine history. Go to Comment
Interesting. Nicely executed. I am not so fond of the process that made them canibals. If "simple" war stress would cause this then why are there not more cases of this after WWI, WWII, or Vietnam (in the US)? The madness does not seem justified given the stressors. Sure they should be depressed. They should be cynical. They should be bitter. They should be vengeful. But insane... in bulk number.. nah.
Now if there was some other reason that caused them to change.. that would make it more believable for me. Magic or spirits okay. Some fungal disease like Ergot would work for me. It just misses the mark, for me.
And what did they do to all the "sane" ones amongst their numbers? Go to Comment
All the sane members of the army were too devoted to the Bishops orders to ever accept another prophet, so they were all killed. At that point, there was no codification of rules, so they were not all necessarily eaten. Looking back on the submission, I have to agree, I need to think of a better cause for the insanity; thanks for adding the text. Go to Comment
Interesting and complex character. I like some of the hooks he has. There is a plot hole or two that seems to be happening here, unexplained.
So where do the marks come from?
I know the answer, or my answer, His demon.
The Demon is a smart one. This plan is working perfectly. The Demon getting its hooks in high places, eliminating the demonic competition, plus generating misery at the same time though the drug trade. (Like that link by the way) His mount's position will soon be able to grant him greater influence upon things. Working both sides of the fence allows him to remove opposition in ways unavailable to anyone else.
The Priests should be able to spot the iconory on his back though. "is covered in pagan symbols for inevitability and death inked in intricate black designs" If the guys down in the hole know it, some of the priests should too. This should be setting up red flags to a number of priests. Thus we have them vs the Charismatic and Powerful Narx Habdur. Go to Comment