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Rod of Rod Control
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Strolen's comment on 2007-01-22 07:30 PM
If I was drinking, I would have spit my drink twice. I must have got here after some serious editing because I really like this one.
Instantly beheaded = spit
Scorched paper as toilet paper = spit

Funny that he never got to test it either. Fun read! I second Wulfhere, journal is a great usable part of the story. Go to Comment
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Strolen's comment on 2008-05-03 10:24 PM
Still smile when I read this. :) Go to Comment
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manfred's comment on 2006-12-29 06:02 PM
We do know your posts, and we like them. Seems we have just become 'men of detail' recently. :)


Welcome back, Cirrus! Go to Comment
Rod of Rod Control
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-12-27 12:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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CirrusWind's comment on 2006-12-26 10:21 PM
Updated: Only updated to correct some poor grammar. Go to Comment
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CirrusWind's comment on 2006-12-29 05:36 PM
Thanks for the comments and support, all.

If you haven't seen any of my other posts, I am a man of brief descriptions. I personally prefer as few details as possible. Enough to get the point across. I find it easier to work ideas in when there's more breathing room. But, if it's details you want, details I can give.

I like Valadaar's suggestion so I will rework this item with a "known" history and a "real" history. Go to Comment
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CirrusWind's comment on 2006-12-29 11:34 PM
Updated: More details to enjoy. Hope you like it. Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2006-12-27 01:52 AM
An interesting ju-jitsu item, turning the strengths of foes agains... whatever the strengths are just facing.
The backstory is... short, and too generic.
A solid 3. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-12-27 08:10 AM
A good idea but without a good backstory so that I will hold my vote. Go to Comment
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-12-27 07:42 AM
Has definate promise.... inovative concept but as the others have said. Very lacking in the meat and potatoes portion of the description of who, what, where, and why. Don't really need a when but it would help. Flesh it out, add some page breaks and I will re-read and re-vote. Go to Comment
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-12-27 01:02 PM
Or was the excerpt in the journal just an account of such an item and not the formula to make one? Perhaps this alchemist strived to make this legendary item he had read about? Go to Comment
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Dozus's comment on 2006-12-26 11:08 PM
Likes: Interesting concept. Not too powerful in that it takes control of a rod or absorbs its abilities, but it just activates them, creating a haywire situation. Nicely written intro...

Dislikes: ...but not enough for me. Some wizard made it and got attacked. Who is this guy? Who attacked him? What were they trying to find? That part almost seems like a cop-out for writing a real backstory. And why would he make such a rod? Some more stuff on that could make this a great post.

I'll hold off on voting until you can make it shine, which I'm sure you can do. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2007-01-22 10:13 PM
wow, I didnt see this one before! :D

What they said! Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2007-01-22 08:21 PM
I like your revision! Great job!

"What the!"
Snick!
Thud.
Spurt Spurt...

:) Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2006-12-28 06:32 AM
Lacking in a lot of areas - give it a re-work.

I suggest listing 'two' histories - the one that is known by people, and then the real history.

The 'known' history can be evasive, incomplete and wrong, but the real history needs to be there. Go to Comment
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-12-27 10:49 AM
Like others, I have a hard time going along with the "unknown" alchemist/mage. A couple of the items that I've submitted suffered from a similar reaction: Even if the players never figure it out, the GM really wants to know what the true origins of the item are.

This unknown prodigy among alchemists: Why did he make such a rod? Was it intended for another purpose, but never completed due to his unfortunate demise? Perhaps it was intended to steal away the powers of other magic items, but all the item's creator finished was the "beta model", intended only to test the first portions of the needed enchantments. We have great (and amusing) detail about what happened after the man's demise, but the beginning of the rod's story is a complete blank.

The journal sounds like it would almost be more interesting than the rod itself. Perhaps its scorched remains hold other secrets, other tantalizing hints of the mysterious researcher's achievements? Such an item could send wizards haring off on many an expedition, convinced that they have a lead on some unknown magical powers. The journal is also the most credible way that the PCs could learn of the rod's theoretical powers. Go to Comment
Ligia's Justice or Iron Fist Bracelet
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Agar's comment on 2005-04-03 07:37 PM
3 hits, one vote for 3 ...

I'd like it more if we knew if you could still use your hand or not.

Basic item, no backstory, description ripped right off of hercules.

4/5 Go to Comment
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2005-04-03 10:05 PM
Who would make such a thing, as useful as it may have been? Was there a special purpose behind it? What was it's backstory? How was it used?
The item itself is fine. In fact, I like it (do you mind if I make my own version of it?). But every item this nice needs to have an equally nice backstory.
I'm apparently not as forgiving of a lack of backstory as Agar, because I give you a...

2/5. Go to Comment
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MoonHunter's comment on 2005-04-06 11:46 PM
Not every item needs a back story. This could be a "type of item", not a unique item... but one of dozens having been made over the years. It is just a "less than perfect" magic item being used by enchanters who want to support monks/ unarmed combatants.

Maybe they could of first been created for a clerical order of the Iron Fisted God. Now since that God's worship has faded away, all that is left if the items and the knowledge to make them. Go to Comment
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CirrusWind's comment on 2005-04-04 05:04 PM
Agar: No you can not still use your hand. It forms a solid IRON FIST. Basically it turns your arm into a bizarre mace (of sorts).

Cap'n: Backstory is worked out but it goes with a character too. I'll get it all linked up soon. Go to Comment
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