ooh! sounds good... I like the way the PCs are forced into a conflict they have nothing to do with at first, and the antagonism with the commanders of their new "platoon" if they are conscripted. It could be the basis for an entire campaign, with the tavern scene the very first time the players get to know each other... I want more! It sounds very promising... Go to Comment
This is a simple, yet elegant idea. It makes for a great mix of horror, religion, and monster.
The explanation of their origin is short and focused.
I like that you added a touch of history to the piece giving it its' own cliche, "Your actions will come back to haunt you."
The explanation of its manifestations is a little bumpy in spots, not transitioning well, nor being as clear as the rest of the piece. Still, more than enough to create a full fledged terror... especially since these things can eat the SKA of others around the person. Go to Comment
Short, Sweet, and Basic. An explanation for religious crunchy bits and how to get them. I think more examples and more guidelines for various thaumaturgical expressions of faith would serve this piece well. Go to Comment