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Banshee's Cry
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Redgre's comment on 2011-11-06 09:17 PM


Interesting flute.  At first glance I would say the drawbacks are on the heavy side.  But I do see why you placed them where they are.  Would ear plugs help the user?  or some other localized silence spell?  Good idea.  I'll use this one.


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Banshee's Cry
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Dossta's comment on 2011-11-08 11:15 AM


In the hands of a skilled necromancer, I wonder if the flute could manifest new powers?  Also, while I understand that it was taken from a banshee, does that mean that all banshees carry an item like this that gives them their power?  Or was it created by some other being?  Overall, a compelling item.


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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Siren no Orakio's comment on 2011-08-18 05:50 AM


Reminds me, actually, of an old Arthur Clarke short, in which humanity comes up short on Judgement day. Punishment is for all the dead to wake up, and for every one to be needless and immortal. The world gets very boring, then an angel talks God out of it on a technicality.



 



Still, very solid. 


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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-08-17 06:09 PM
I think I work there... Well done sir. Now time to go look at something happy! Go to Comment
The Hell of Half-Nothings
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-08-18 02:13 AM


Given the nature of this particular hell, it may be difficult, but methinks this lacks ... something... to make it really stand out.


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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-08-16 12:16 PM


What a boring place to be. 4.5


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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Chaosmark's comment on 2011-08-15 07:44 PM
Remember, without surprise there is no anticipation. Without anticipation, one loses a significant portion (in some cases, all) of the enjoyment from activity.

Every minute of every day is that stretch of time right after a break when you have nothing to look forward to except more of the same crap you've been dealing with all day. Nothing new, nothing fresh, nothing exciting. Drab. Dreary. Boring. Go to Comment
The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Chaosmark's comment on 2011-08-15 07:45 PM
I never read Dragon Magazine, so I'm not sure how well done Nogard was, but I certainly appreciate the compliment! Go to Comment
The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Chaosmark's comment on 2011-08-17 07:18 PM
Dear Cthulhu, yes. I had to stop writing every so often and do something cheery. This thing is depressing. Go to Comment
The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Redgre's comment on 2011-08-15 07:07 PM


A very real hell.  Dying a thousand times a year of boredom.  Alot of parallels to Nogard, the PC retirement world proposed in Dragon Magazine umpteen years ago, only you made it much more.  I like it.


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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Forganthus's comment on 2012-05-23 01:31 AM
I like the idea of a conductor instead of a boatman. It especially brings up the idea of how current the gods and psychopomps need to be to keep up with their worshippers. If the ancient Greeks kept their religion constant up into the cyberpunk timeline, would they still keep a few gold coins around because Charon doesn't take creds?

As far as a setting goes, it is lacking something. Geography, I think. Maybe a mound of all the passengers who were to dispirited to move more than 10' away from the train. After getting off, you first have to walk over a slow wall of these guys. Or the OCD guys in hell (does hell cure OCD?) who, despite not giving a darn, go and sit in even rows somewhere compulsively. Or they move the other immobile people into lines. Go to Comment
The Hell of Half-Nothings
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Dossta's comment on 2011-08-20 04:58 PM


I really love the description of this place, and I can imagine it in vivid clarity and detail.  The writing is really well done.  However, I agree with Echo: it simply lacks something to make it come alive for me.  It's the central concept, really, that bothers.  Why should anticipation be needed to enjoy a job well done?  You have a vision for the project, work towards its completion, and can admire the result when you're done -- no surpise necessary. 



Perhaps what you were looking for is not a lack of surprise, but a feeling of waste.  The feeling that one's talents, skills and abilities lie unused and unrecognized.  Having to watch others bumble along at a task that you are much better suited for.  That or just simply being prevented from doing what comes naturally, or from using the skills that you have the most pride in.



Either way, this is a solid piece.  I just see so much potential for it to evolve into something truly horrifying.

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The Hell of Half-Nothings
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-08-26 05:09 PM


This sounds like a hell born from the symptoms of depression.



I imagine that at some point the souls here would wish for a fiery hell, just so they could feel something.


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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-08-14 01:48 PM


I like the description of the place, but I am not sure a lack of suprise would have such an effect on emotions. Maybe if the people could not feel anything they would act in such a way but I don't think a lack of suprise alone would go so far as to negate actual physical pleasure or pain. 


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The University of Firdon
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Strolen's comment on 2010-05-29 10:16 PM
A map! It is glorious. Meshes with the Ether post and makes sense that way. A solid description of a magical school. Go to Comment
The University of Firdon
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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-05-29 11:56 AM
Nice, the Oxford University of Magic. Go to Comment
The University of Firdon
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Chaosmark's comment on 2010-05-31 05:39 PM
Update: Added the thaumatech and steampunk freetexts. At first I didn't think they really applied, but this is a location suitable for both. Go to Comment
The University of Firdon
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valadaar's comment on 2010-06-01 06:17 PM
I do like this - nicely done! Go to Comment
The University of Firdon
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Nafar's comment on 2010-05-30 07:34 PM
Glacial Cairn
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Siren no Orakio's comment on 2009-01-18 10:27 AM
Fun, indeed. It also occurs to me that, should you succeed, that being exposed to the flame of rebirth of the phoenix might be somewhat beneficial, though possibly also with certain drawbacks. It might even return -other- dead in the area. Who may or may not be very happy with that thought. Go to Comment
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