This is great, number 27 got me. Have you read
I recommend Clockwork Fagin. It reminds me of number 30.
I like these posts that give depth and details to little items. Things like this don't make your game or your plot but they make the world richer. Also the more detail an item has the more a PC can take to manipulating it and problem solving with it.
I'd like to know two things:
a) as Anaszt's descent into vampirism would make a fascinating tale for heroes to discover, how exactly did the switch from peacemaker to bloodsucker come about? (We all know how a poor description of a hero's fall can ruin the whole experience, see Star Wars: Revenge of the Sith)
b) what sets the Anaszti apart from normal vampires, beside the pyramid scheme of blood?
I feel like this post is sort of aimed wrong. The most interesting parts of the submission are the backstory and the "pyramid scheme of blood," to quote EchoMirage. But I feel like both of those are sort of neglected in order to focus on the less important business of describing a vampire's powers. Since these guys aren't too different from normal vampires with regards to their abilities, I would have preferred a short bit on abilities, with more detail on the rest. You say that an NPC post is coming for Anaszt; I think that this might have been better suited to being a small part of that post.
As relates to this, though, I am curious as to the extent of their regeneration. You say that they can regenerate even lethal wounds. How lethal are we talking about? Stabbed in the lung lethal? Decapitated lethal? Burned to ashes lethal? Because if it's either of the latter, I don't see much good luck for any vampire hunters, even without a magical surprise.
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I could probably be snarky about the originality comment, since it doesn't seem to make much sense, but there doesn't seem to be much point. Your feedback was honest and, while I disagree with bits of it, I accept that one might think the Anaszti were a bit too dangerous and without some weaknesses. I've modified the submission accordingly.