just got home, long day, and I decided to read just one new sub tonight (from the plethora of new ones). I picked soley based on the names and titles of the subs. I figured whichever one grabs my attention, thats the one I'll read. You can guess the rest :D
I dunno', I just never thought much of this one
I tried to make it too strange and philosophical, and it turned out just seeming hodge-podge too me. It seems too clownish to be truly bizarre and disturbing and frightening the way my demons are supposed to be. Go to Comment
Missed this a while ago it seemed. I have to agree to with CP's own accessment. It has some beautiful elements, but seem confused and stunted in many ways. Still, it is a brave attempt at the unique. Go to Comment
I agree a little more love on the formatting would make it easier to roll through. Either way, I often find myself entranced by your style, CP, and I love it. This one was a little lighter on the "legend" tone than others and was more as a historical piece which fit the subject great. Love it. Go to Comment
It sounds scary, but you really could write history books of worlds and kingdoms that never existed.
Temak Buk is quite the 'enlightened dictator' of your story, with few scruples, but enough smarts to become the victorious side at the end of the day, and be the favoured emperor that pulls the unwashed masses forward. It might be interesting to know if he was really so amazing as it is said here (undoubtly a history captured by his court historians, or of some of his descendants). Bet there are some weaknesses that are not publicly mentioned. ;)
If I had to pick on something, the formatting could use a second edit, but that is it. But this is a solid historical submission with a man that would leave traces in any place of the setting - that's the true value I see here. Go to Comment