Lacking in the detail and too much of the general. This creature could be awesome but with all the powers and wings and tail there is really no mention of it as he is growing up. I imagine he can fly which would be something else. Saving a cat from a tree, something heroic where his mutation saved the day would help him be accepted.
OK background for a PC in a game, you don't need much for that, but we thrive on the motivations and such here and that is missing. Go to Comment
Just because a person is odd, does not make them dramatic or interesting. Though,it can help. This is a better character for a story rather than a game, because it needs to be center stage and the only odd thing to be really interesting and provide dramatic elements. Even to make a story with him work, you would have to turn up the personality elements.
What motivates him, really? Why is he just more than a guy with an odd background? What makes him special or at least more interesting than any other guy/ gal with an odd background?
The character has some initial interest. The background is a little flat, but that can be overcome. The question is, what do we do with it? How would one incorporate this into a game? Why would one want to put it into their game? Go to Comment
Definately shows some promise, filling in the gaps of the missing father could really round out the story. I am curious to know how he has a dragon father when the only dragon 'known' was the blue with the ogres.
A super-powered orphan. Hooray. Can't contain my excitement. His personality need fleshing out. Likewise, most people have
b) some internal conflict
c) people they care about and social contacts
A common mistake is to assume that a weird heritage is sufficient to make a character stand out - perhaps at a first glance, but he needs to stand out as a person likewise.
Give him a less dry background, play around with the idea to produce something unique.
Another note: the last paragraph is but an alibi so that noone can say that he's munchkin. Well: why exactly does magic hurt him? Does it hurt him more than somebody else? Why? What was the part with the setting sun supposed to mean? Was he blinded by it? Is he more light sensitive than a human?
Also: think of reasons - why did his father bed an elven femme; were no dragon ladies available, or ... was he too ugly, or too timid to court one? Did he have an elf fetish? Go to Comment
Not a bad idea, but not too much is original here. He seems like yet another orphan who is misunderstood and rises against the odds to be a hero.
Also, what happened to his father? Is there potential plot hooks involving him?
Overall 2/5, could use editting and something to make it more unique. Go to Comment
Faerie foods with unusual effects. Like faerie sausages that turn the eaters into wiener dogs, faerie wines that make the drinker whiny, etc. There's a table in Palladium Fantasy RPG which has a table of ideas.