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31 years IRL(33 ish!) of my Mysantia Campaign
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Aramax's comment on 2015-01-10 10:29 AM
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31 years IRL(33 ish!) of my Mysantia Campaign
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-03 07:08 PM
As you requested, a comment but no actual vote. I skipped over some of the contents b/c some of the content is just too game-specific for a non-gamer for me but I read most of it.

Firstly, personally I am indifferent to whether this is a sub or a forum thread (on a theoretical level). I think the main reason of why you're getting a low score is because as it is, this sub appears to be in draft form like you are typing up your experience in stream-of-consciousness notes form and haven't tidied any of it up. If you don't feel like tidying it up at all, then it's prob. better in the forums. The actual content is fine as far as I could tell since this is your memoir and I can see that it is filled with a lot of information of personal gaming experience etc and has a logical structure talking thru how you first started and then going by chronological order of your progression.

In your subs so far, I find the formatting has always been a little less than what is to my liking. I know you capital all your titles but can you bold the headers and also put an extra line between sections? No big issue but just makes the subs more reader friendly. Not sure whether you work from Word or not but if you do, copy and pasting from Word to the Input Sub page still retains the formatting if you just have bolded headers and plain text. If you want to start looking at somewhat more advanced formatting (different sized headings, putting text in boxes, inserting a page break etc.), take a look at Strolen's CSS Demonstration sub accessible through the "I am Helping" link under the Library drop-down menu.
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31 years IRL(33 ish!) of my Mysantia Campaign
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
Tusserk's comment on 2015-01-03 01:37 AM
Awesooome

I have only ever had 1 long term game, and it only lasted just over a single year in length.

Intrigue, palace or otherwise... who, what, where, when, why, how? Go to Comment
Implosion Disease (a Tale of Mysantia)
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Swamp)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-11-25 12:32 AM
One thing that puzzles me though is why this sub belongs under an Ethereal lifeform inhabiting the Swamps? Other than that, a solid sub that's complete but just doesn't particularly draw me. Go to Comment
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2014-12-04 02:57 PM
Vancian magic, ok, i see it! Some interesting bits here to expand upon. Reminds me a bit of the farcical aspects of Rhialto the Marvelous, and his bubbling vats. Go to Comment
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-12-05 08:48 AM
These feel like the exhortations of a magic-users personal assistant :)
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Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Aramax's comment on 2014-10-30 09:17 AM
I like pushing the edge. What could be more edgy than a sub expanding on Vancian magic! LOLs 1s and 4 s in my future. TWEEK! Go to Comment
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
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Aramax's comment on 2014-10-31 06:50 AM
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Aramax's comment on 2014-12-07 06:51 AM
I'm Flattered, LOVE Vance!! Go to Comment
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-10-29 05:00 PM
I like this. I find the various stories associated with the spells charming. Go to Comment
Book of Memorization (a Tale of Mysantia)
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2014-10-30 09:51 PM
A very novel and interesting take on how to memorize spells. Could we get more than one entry per school? How about descriptions of the book's illustrations? Perhaps it would also be better to divide the sub by the various sections on schools rather than pages. Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Maggot's comment on 2014-11-03 08:29 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-10-28 08:29 AM
A fun read, and I can feel elements of Elric of Melnibone, and you probably shouldn't pick up Exalted, or you should, but it unfolds like Nekcrola's story.

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Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Pariah's comment on 2014-10-29 01:23 AM
It definitely fits the old school aesthetic, which is all I'm grading this on because I'm absolutely horrible at grading NPCs, the main reason I don't normally vote on them. Ignoring minor formatting issues, it's a solid submission. Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Murometz's comment on 2014-10-28 12:22 PM
Certainly has that old-school feel! It's still choppy in places, but ok, thats your style. Plothooks made me smile. You be Questing! Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-12-15 07:19 PM
I like it, the prose starts out witty and cheeky, but it seems like you run out steam towards the end and just start listing things. Overall nice sub, that describes its subject as much by tone as by the facts listed. This was a fun read. Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
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valadaar's comment on 2014-10-28 08:29 AM
A good Old School villain with lots of possibilities. She seems a little too powerful, but given its vintage (1981), it works. It certainly has far more depth than anything I would have put together at the same age. I had not started gaming yet in 1981, much less worldbuilding.

There is a lot of detail packed into this one - hints and hooks into your campaign.
I'd like to see more of this!


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Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-10-28 10:36 AM
This certainly would feel at home in a module form the 80's, and captures the same slightly dry yet compelling and informative style that was the norm in those old school modules

A few more plot hooks and perhaps a role playing pointers bit might finish rounding her out, but as she stands she's a classic old school NPC that can figure prominently as either a patron of main antagonist of a campaign, nicely done!

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Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-11-06 12:41 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Aramax's comment on 2014-10-27 09:00 AM
Note
This is almost EXACTLY the NPC from 1981 about 92% of this sub is how I used her, with only a little embellishment added Go to Comment
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