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Sunshine!
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Campaign Defining)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:43 PM
This has a strong 1984 feel for me. Go to Comment
Sunshine!
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Campaign Defining)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-17 05:10 AM
Remember
1 We can use this on only a limited number of areas, it doesn't need to be everywhere
2 While I feel it fits perfectly,We don't have to use it at all Go to Comment
Nekkid
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-13 12:15 AM
You are kind of disrespecting the 100 word challenge. Go to Comment
Nekkid
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-16 08:14 PM
This is neat, It could be used for almost any setting. It is a good write up with clear details and strong feeling of verisimilitude. But that it doesn't really world build for the setting except that it gives anti-establishment vocabulary for setting in which the conflict between the classes seems to be a more theme. Go to Comment
Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-16 08:17 PM
This write up is weak sauce. If you have to reference the goth movement you are either brainstorming or breaking into the GM voice. Go to Comment
Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:26 PM
We're not gonna Take It!

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Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:28 PM
Truly and completely LOLs (wish I could up vote you again!) Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-13 12:32 AM
It is nice piece of culture here. I think what you are saying is that this a music style embraced by the children of the well to do, and that the fashion and style of music started as a very contrived medium. This culture has gone mainstream, and the clubs represent a hip place to meet. This sort of details is nice if you want a quick reference grab-and-gone counter culture club in your story. You have got some slang, some fashion and a style of music. But what are you trying to say with phrase such as the is culture "has LED to experimental homosexuality, drug use and stuff? Are you suggesting that is a widely held of view of this by the culture, like how people blamed Marlyn Manson for school shootings or you suggesting that something about this actually leads people to these behaviors? If you were about this culture from a in world perspective what would people say about it?

What kind of hats were you imaging?



I do like this idea, but I wish you could count to 100 or at least try to count to 100. If you want to write super short subs that is fine, but it is just weird that you would tie 100 word sub to subs that are over 100 words. Sheldon would not be pleased. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:19 PM
I think with a bit of work, it would fit in the 100 word submission.

It makes sense apart from I"m not sure what BND stands for. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:14 AM
My basic concept here was:mixing Hippies(group sex and drugs) beatniks (experimental homosexuality and gear) and Rock and roll. Removed 100 word thing to please Sheldon(all praise Sheldon).led is poor choice of words.will change. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:31 AM
I tweaked per your suggestions. These latest couple of additions to Mystic's setting were very short of purpose. while I could easily expand them, I was looking at the practicalities of word count in a source book or the main rules. Adding cool flesh that for the most part should be just side notes to a setting. The other piece I am currently working on is for what I hope to be one of the major baddies, and am putting a lot more into that. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:38 AM
specificly, I was thinking of the side page notes in GURPS sourcebooks Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:21 PM
oops will fix Go to Comment
The Spear and The Shield
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-05-20 10:25 AM
Since the Refuge seems to be over............. Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:07 PM
Amazing detail and depth on this one. Very good job! Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:10 PM
It was a true collaboration, axle brought the best out of me then added some awesome stuff, Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Morte's comment on 2015-02-14 12:09 PM
Love it. A cool idea would be to set up a rival cult or what have you centered on nature or something? All in all, a fun piece to read! Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
MysticMoon's comment on 2015-02-12 10:40 AM
Excellent work! Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Trans World)
Dossta's comment on 2015-12-01 06:17 PM

I love cults, particularly when they are as well-defined and original as this one. I love the origin story, I love the dogma, and I love the thematic labels for everything (Gear, Cog, Professor, etc). There isn't much that needs to be improved here, content-wise, though I would suggest going over it one more time to clean up the writing and correct little inconsistencies (i.e. a shot vs a quart of motor oil during the initiation ceremony). Also, please add the "cult" and possibly the "steampunk" freetext, so that it can be found more easily.

Overall a very solid sub, one that I would be happy to place in a steam-punk or even a near-future game, with a bit of tweaking.

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The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2016-04-03 07:21 AM
I like how this is coming together. I would suggest looking into some of Captain Penguin's stuff for the wreckage of societies destroyed by the whales, such as the Mountain of Boats Go to Comment
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