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It's A Gone World
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Aramax's comment on 2014-10-13 11:43 AM
creative licence to show better in some ways but over all the same
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It's A Gone World
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Aramax's comment on 2014-10-14 06:30 AM
rather than cause an incedent I have pulled this. First off I agree that this was a very poor choice for a 100 word, I am very impulsive and sometimes act before I think. I don't think it was in poor taste, it was in the wrong format (I doubt I will re-do this longer thou).
I am the very last person to want to offend or cause trouble, just not in my nature.As to cencorship, let's face it, we are all here to have fun, a big debate on a sub-par sub is does not really fit in w/ how I want to be percived here..Let's put this out in the trash and be done with it. Go to Comment
It's A Gone World
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-13 12:11 PM
Aramax, I challenged this one. If you feel the need to make a comment preemptively defending the sub, that should tell you something. The potential here to offend outweighs any utility. This is something that could be pursued, but it needs to be handled to care and sensitivity, and I'm sorry, but that didn't happen here.

In addition, there's two other issues which were not challenge-worthy, but which I think deserve mention.

First, this isn't a 100 word sub; it's a stub. I haven't had a problem with your short format before this, but an idea touching on such a topic deserves more thought and consideration than trying to fit it in such a short word count.

Second, run this through spell check and grammar, or have someone proofread it. I typo like mad and I know it, so I don't expect perfection, But some effort to clean up a post would be nice. Go to Comment
It's A Gone World
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custos's comment on 2014-10-14 02:02 AM
I like the political aspects of it.
If you want to rewrite here are my two cents: address the solutions to reproduction which can be complicated in a mostly gay+lesbian world.
Also "through education, brainwashing and media" doesn't work because it's genetic and what you mentioned wouldn't work no matter how hard they tried. Try to go with a retrovirus(with a mysterious origin) getting out of control, you don't see the effects until the next generation when it's too late. Now you got an interesting situation on your hand. Go to Comment
Cool Fight Location/encounter #1
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2014-10-16 08:50 PM
Should be turned into an idea seed rather than a submission. Neat combat though. Go to Comment
30 More Minor Weapons
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valadaar's comment on 2014-10-09 10:58 AM
Did this escape your in work folder? 8 is somewhat less than 30 :)

Also, could you use full sentences as opposed to fragments?

eg:

This broad sword appears to be made from grey stone. It is magically protected from all harm.

The use of fragments makes it seem more like quick notes and brainstorming rather than a completed submission.




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Xaos Elemental, A Tale of Mysantia
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Aramax's comment on 2014-10-08 10:10 AM
It's a Chaotic feature Go to Comment
Xaos Elemental, A Tale of Mysantia
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Xintar's comment on 2014-10-08 10:02 AM
4/5 A very intrerresting idea, but why do you need to hit it three times with the same attack? I guess there is some bigger reason than that it is harder to fight now, but I can't figure it out. Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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Dozus's comment on 2014-10-08 02:01 PM
Practical, straight-forward, a little intimidating to see an opponent sprout more limbs suddenly. Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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Silveressa's comment on 2014-10-09 08:24 PM
Fun and effective for Shadowrun, just the kind of thing a basic thug would use to help equal up to a street sam or physical adept in close quarter brawl. Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2014-10-16 08:52 PM
Cool idea. Neat missions. Sub could use a little polish (capitalization, etc.) Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2014-10-16 08:54 PM
Oh, forgot, very important, please put the long from of the acronym and a bit about it in the description next to "100 word challenge" to give someone a vague idea of whether or not they might find the sub useful. Go to Comment
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-08 11:39 AM
I like the idea. I guess I can't complain that it seems short since it was a 100 word challenge. :P Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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Tusserk's comment on 2014-11-18 04:05 AM
I agree, this is definitely something I could see in a Shadowrun game Go to Comment
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crucifiction's comment on 2014-10-12 05:47 AM
I like it. Very cool. I'd love to see it expanded upon in an actual game book.

In the hooks, when you say "Eliminate Supplier", all I can think of is the lines from 21 and 22 Jump Street: "Find the Dealer. Infiltrate the Supplier." Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
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Scrasamax's comment on 2012-11-19 11:33 PM

Chase is given and the PCs encounter a crevasse. They have a small amount of time to figure out how to cross before the baddies in pursuit catch up to them. The lead baddie invokes a powerful necromancy spell and causes the dead who have been thrown in the crevasse (local funeral tradition) to rise up and form a skeleton bridge. Once the baddies are across many skeletons detach from the bridge and join the baddies as more expendable troops. Anything the skeletons kill is carried back to the crevasse army ant style. The lead baddie cannot control the undead, only guide them.

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Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
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Scrasamax's comment on 2012-11-19 11:34 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
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Dozus's comment on 2012-11-20 07:29 AM
Ditto to what Caesar said. While it may be an "ode" to classic fight scenes, it's not particularly interesting or different from that. What can make it more interesting? What makes it unique? Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
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Murometz's comment on 2012-12-04 07:15 PM
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
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Murometz's comment on 2012-12-04 09:10 PM
KALI-MAH! Go to Comment
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