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Nekkid
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-16 08:14 PM
This is neat, It could be used for almost any setting. It is a good write up with clear details and strong feeling of verisimilitude. But that it doesn't really world build for the setting except that it gives anti-establishment vocabulary for setting in which the conflict between the classes seems to be a more theme. Go to Comment
Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-16 08:17 PM
This write up is weak sauce. If you have to reference the goth movement you are either brainstorming or breaking into the GM voice. Go to Comment
Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:26 PM
We're not gonna Take It!

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Daughters of Kalleum
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:28 PM
Truly and completely LOLs (wish I could up vote you again!) Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-13 12:32 AM
It is nice piece of culture here. I think what you are saying is that this a music style embraced by the children of the well to do, and that the fashion and style of music started as a very contrived medium. This culture has gone mainstream, and the clubs represent a hip place to meet. This sort of details is nice if you want a quick reference grab-and-gone counter culture club in your story. You have got some slang, some fashion and a style of music. But what are you trying to say with phrase such as the is culture "has LED to experimental homosexuality, drug use and stuff? Are you suggesting that is a widely held of view of this by the culture, like how people blamed Marlyn Manson for school shootings or you suggesting that something about this actually leads people to these behaviors? If you were about this culture from a in world perspective what would people say about it?

What kind of hats were you imaging?



I do like this idea, but I wish you could count to 100 or at least try to count to 100. If you want to write super short subs that is fine, but it is just weird that you would tie 100 word sub to subs that are over 100 words. Sheldon would not be pleased. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:19 PM
I think with a bit of work, it would fit in the 100 word submission.

It makes sense apart from I"m not sure what BND stands for. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:14 AM
My basic concept here was:mixing Hippies(group sex and drugs) beatniks (experimental homosexuality and gear) and Rock and roll. Removed 100 word thing to please Sheldon(all praise Sheldon).led is poor choice of words.will change. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:31 AM
I tweaked per your suggestions. These latest couple of additions to Mystic's setting were very short of purpose. while I could easily expand them, I was looking at the practicalities of word count in a source book or the main rules. Adding cool flesh that for the most part should be just side notes to a setting. The other piece I am currently working on is for what I hope to be one of the major baddies, and am putting a lot more into that. Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 05:38 AM
specificly, I was thinking of the side page notes in GURPS sourcebooks Go to Comment
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:21 PM
oops will fix Go to Comment
The Spear and The Shield
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-05-20 10:25 AM
Since the Refuge seems to be over............. Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:07 PM
Amazing detail and depth on this one. Very good job! Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:10 PM
It was a true collaboration, axle brought the best out of me then added some awesome stuff, Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Morte's comment on 2015-02-14 12:09 PM
Love it. A cool idea would be to set up a rival cult or what have you centered on nature or something? All in all, a fun piece to read! Go to Comment
Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
MysticMoon's comment on 2015-02-12 10:40 AM
Excellent work! Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:00 AM
This is an interesting start - it feels like a set of notes as opposed to a full submission.

Some neat ideas here. Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-07 11:12 AM
The 1000 yr cycle is a based on the fational that longer cycles would lead to high enough magic to at least be able to hide a great deal of the world Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 11:15 AM
I felt I needed to put the full description of the way I was using the whales to make my other subs a little more understandable at this time, totally agree that this is only 3.5 at this time, but this is going to be my primary codex page for the Stolen(Strolen) World. Go to Comment
Ryenionn The Deathless
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Scrasamax's comment on 2015-02-01 11:25 AM
This is probably not going to win any points, but I think you spent too much time on the backstory. If you made it more concise, you would have room to give more detail on what Rye can actually do as an undead, and why he is special enough to rise six times instead of just the once that most undead get. Still a good submission, and entertaining read. Go to Comment
Ryenionn The Deathless
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Dozus's comment on 2015-02-01 12:34 AM
Just a minor correction: "Nod to Gossomer, for his Solomon Grundy forum post, my inspiration" should be "Nod to Gossamer, for *her* Solomon Grundy forum post" Go to Comment
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