One thing that puzzles me though is why this sub belongs under an Ethereal lifeform inhabiting the Swamps? Other than that, a solid sub that's complete but just doesn't particularly draw me. Go to Comment
A very novel and interesting take on how to memorize spells. Could we get more than one entry per school? How about descriptions of the book's illustrations? Perhaps it would also be better to divide the sub by the various sections on schools rather than pages. Go to Comment
It definitely fits the old school aesthetic, which is all I'm grading this on because I'm absolutely horrible at grading NPCs, the main reason I don't normally vote on them. Ignoring minor formatting issues, it's a solid submission. Go to Comment
I like it, the prose starts out witty and cheeky, but it seems like you run out steam towards the end and just start listing things. Overall nice sub, that describes its subject as much by tone as by the facts listed. This was a fun read. Go to Comment
A good Old School villain with lots of possibilities. She seems a little too powerful, but given its vintage (1981), it works. It certainly has far more depth than anything I would have put together at the same age. I had not started gaming yet in 1981, much less worldbuilding.
There is a lot of detail packed into this one - hints and hooks into your campaign.
I'd like to see more of this!
This certainly would feel at home in a module form the 80's, and captures the same slightly dry yet compelling and informative style that was the norm in those old school modules
A few more plot hooks and perhaps a role playing pointers bit might finish rounding her out, but as she stands she's a classic old school NPC that can figure prominently as either a patron of main antagonist of a campaign, nicely done!
No offence taken, My subs have been sloppy and I was prob too concerned with grammar and spelling ,that the format suffered. I was trying to go old school and now at the same time..I am pleased that you found the sub solid for content (but that's never been a problem for me) Unfortunately your criticisms are valid. Go to Comment