This submission is great. While I do not love it I will definately give credit where it is due. It was packed full of information that was obviously known by you instead of just what you have been told or research.
I took a few points off for paragraphing though, which is why I gave you a 3.5 instead of a 4.0... please do not let that disuade you from thinking I am a very hard critique as I am not. Go to Comment
To quote Moon: "Very nicely done." I can't really add anything to it, aside from perhaps a small grammar error at the end of the first paragraph. Read it aloud and it should make sense as to why it doesn't quite flow. Go to Comment
This is a great horse submission, but I would have liked just a
_bit_ more to tie it into fantasy. What differentiates it from a Wikipedia entry about an existing breed of horse to decidedly non experts such as myself? Go to Comment
The Akhal-Teke is a real horse breed that develops a metallic golden coat. A more fantastic version could have a coat the color of pure gold, or silver making the horse appear to be made of the precious metal.