This submission is great. While I do not love it I will definately give credit where it is due. It was packed full of information that was obviously known by you instead of just what you have been told or research.
I took a few points off for paragraphing though, which is why I gave you a 3.5 instead of a 4.0... please do not let that disuade you from thinking I am a very hard critique as I am not. Go to Comment
To quote Moon: "Very nicely done." I can't really add anything to it, aside from perhaps a small grammar error at the end of the first paragraph. Read it aloud and it should make sense as to why it doesn't quite flow. Go to Comment
This is a great horse submission, but I would have liked just a
_bit_ more to tie it into fantasy. What differentiates it from a Wikipedia entry about an existing breed of horse to decidedly non experts such as myself? Go to Comment
A certain country allows most civilians to carry weapons, but only if they are potentially deadly. Pepper sprays, stun guns/tasers, batons, and dart guns are banned. And if you kill someone and are not acquitted at trial, the punishment is to be hanged the day after you were found guilty. The message here is that if you want to go armed, you had better be prepared to risk killing someone and being executed unless it was clearly self defense.
When it comes to combat spells, again, only the highly dangerous can legally be cast with the same possible consequences if cast wrongly.
Encounter ( Any ) | November 27, 2016 |