I'm not sure there are any redeeming qualities in this one. I think the last line hits it on the head. It's almost like I was handed an overly generic, staple, cookie-cutter, bland, stereotypical wizard, then given some totally useless information. When given the information I looked up and said "Whut?" then I was told: Oh... Just act like Gandalf.
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Titans are cool. I don't see the word 'Apogee' nearly as often as I would like to, so kudos to that. It feels like someone threw Lord of the Rings into a blender with some extremely watered down Greek mythos, then poured this interesting piece into a sippy cup. Meh.
As others said, it could use some more fleshing out and reworded in places, perhaps reading the post out loud to yourself will help you catch the grammar errors such as "You know the true behind all the conspiracies,"
In general I've found characters are more appealing and memorable when they don't act "just like" any popular character from a novel or movie. Rather then suggest role playing the character like an already established one (in this case Gandalf) try to provide enough depth and detail in your presentation they will be able to act like the character they just read about instead of imitating a different one.