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Blues and Yellows of The Colors
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-22 11:29 AM
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Order of Iron Gauntlet
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2016-03-08 11:15 AM
A decent group. More factions is frequently a good thing :)
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Aviontix Tombs
Dungeons  (Desert)   (Style)
valadaar's comment on 2008-04-23 08:05 PM
The texts indicates we should remember that those who die in these tombs go to Merideth. Why would I remember that when this fact was not mentioned in the text until that point. It would be better to me for the text to indicate that those who die here have their souls sent to Merideth, and explain why. I would not make the assumption that the reader will have read all of the Aviontix before reading this sub, and this appears to be a major fact.

I had to do some searching to find out what Merideth is - the first occurance should be linked to improve readability, or even adding the phrase ("the Aviontix City of the Dead"), etc.

On a minor note - there are a few typos here - Gauntlet,greath,etc, and Larger has an extra capitalization.

On the plus side, it is interesting that an avian race would have tombs in the ground - it is contrary to ones expectations and provides a reason for what otherwise would be bizarre traps. Go to Comment
Aviontix Tombs
Dungeons  (Desert)   (Style)
valadaar's comment on 2008-04-24 08:12 AM
K, I stand corrected - need to read more of the other subs. I was just going through the dungeons :) Go to Comment
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2016-11-09 08:33 AM
This is very good. I like the mythic feel of it and the whole super-ancient bird worship, as well as various avian monsters having this type of origin. Helps to tie those creatures to your world.

Nicely done!
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Grand Staff of the Black Dragon Magi
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Sentient)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-19 04:03 PM
Strikes me as a specific 'instance' of the standard AD&D Staff of the magii, a bit up-gunned and given a good backstory. Go to Comment
Prestige class - the Dracoran
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2009-06-08 12:19 PM
Per moons comment, moving back into in-work. Go to Comment
Prestige class - the Dracoran
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2009-06-08 12:20 PM
Update: Take heed of provided comments, and if you have a chance, give it a rework. Go to Comment
Minor Races and Race Ideas
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-29 08:55 AM
Nice scroll/codex! (Scrodex?, Coroll?)

Faaar to few votes on it though. Go to Comment
Short overview of the Effin (Red Elves)
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-29 09:16 PM
I can help thinking - 'Those Effin' bastards...' :) Go to Comment
World Building 102: Environment building the MoonHunter way
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-01 09:27 PM
Very , very good.

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Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-05-16 06:45 PM
Ah yes, Strolen is helping arm the Barbarian Horde! Go to Comment
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-14 06:17 PM
A facinating spirit, containing the Communist ideal. Go to Comment
Thoktu Masif
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2016-05-27 03:07 PM
This is an excellent location. A bump from the depths of time.

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The Demon Mirror
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2016-05-09 01:19 PM
This is an interesting plot. I like how you make it hard for the player to sort out who's who.

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Ring of Stonekin
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-10 04:08 PM
Can't add to what has already been said, but I like this item(s) :). Go to Comment
Mona Island
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2014-04-04 10:55 AM
Guess the Dragon got him.
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Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-07-16 11:17 AM
There are various comments about it being somewhat munchkin. This can be waved away by the simple expedient of saying 'almost' anything. The potion has a limited duration that necessitates multiple doses, the potion does not keep well, and the ingredients are hard to get - likely leaving a trail of crime that could be traced. I would expect any defenses against magic your game system provides to still be valid, so resistance rolls, saving throws and the like should still apply.

In short(?), a well detailed, well described potion that certainly fits the category of a wish-fulfillment item.

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The Diamond Desert
Locations  (Area)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-14 12:19 PM
This is an interesting locale with lots of ideas.

On presentation - there are quite a number of typos - prarie, interpitation, etc, and there is a lack of spaces after punctuation such as commas and periods. There is debate about whether you should have one space or two, but you need at least one :)

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Pure Scent
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2016-01-27 11:46 AM
This is cool - I love 'simple' alchemical substances like this. Awesome!
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