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NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2013-06-18 09:16 PM
This fellow could easily serve a couple of roles, perhaps both mentor and foe.

He's an archetype, and a useful one. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-07-11 09:56 AM
Not bad, its interesting that his powers are really only hinted at in the special equipment section, and the ends he has been able to achieve.

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NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2016-02-18 11:05 AM
A good reskinning of Bond. I could see him being used :)
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valadaar's comment on 2014-03-13 12:23 PM
I agree. A good starting point and bit player.
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NPCs  (Major)   (Travelers)
valadaar's comment on 2006-09-01 08:30 PM
The Spirit Glade
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-06 10:48 PM
I agree with Scras. A nice piece of weirdness.

Perhaps this would be a good place to converse, perhaps with some safety, with things from beyond if ones nerve and sanity were up to the task. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Minor)   (Knowledge/Lore)
valadaar's comment on 2007-12-05 03:30 PM
An interesting idea, though in need of some spell checking. Go to Comment
Anamis's Spectre-Shard
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-05 10:26 PM
This is a really neat idea! Go to Comment
Mind Bite
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-11-17 03:27 PM
A cool item with definite role-playing potential.

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Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-18 07:35 PM
There is potential here, it needs help to get out. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Natural)
valadaar's comment on 2007-10-13 07:40 PM

This is a neat take on the Elf.
Hmm, Elf freetext? Go to Comment
Rurik's Tomb
Locations  (Other)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2011-07-10 07:32 PM

First thing, look at the provided feedback.

Second, I'd completely redo everything past "The Wight vanished, and perhaps it still sleeps in one of the last of the undisturbed tombs."

Do not go into 'module' detail with such things as "If there is a ranger or someone with wilderness lore in the group, he or she will know that the spores of the fungus are highly dangerous" - that is somewhat game specific and is jarring in terminology compared to the lead in story.

Instead, since this is not a full length module, but an idea that others will flesh out to full detail, outline the major cool or interesting features of the tomb. Perhaps carry on the narrative somehow to describe the tomb in the same tone as the lead in text.

Third, clearly define which King is which. I assume King Arkon is the older king and Dora's father is the newer king. Say King Rurick is King Rurick a lot sooner then when metioning Rurick's tomb. I was orignally confused as to who was who.

Fourth, I can't help but think of Dora the Explorer when the princess name is Dora.


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NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2016-02-03 11:19 AM
Lots to this one, with unanswered questions of course, but sometimes thats a good thing.

A decent backstory - I like it.
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Locations  (Any)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-26 11:58 AM
A good start, but appears to be just that.

It is pretty unremarkable so far but could be a lot better. Go to Comment
The Sword Elanzer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
valadaar's comment on 2016-04-18 11:40 AM
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Disappearing children
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-10 09:15 AM
This smells like a Grimm fairy tale. Simple and effective.

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Little Dark
Locations  (Forest/ Jungle)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2012-09-14 11:27 AM
Found this using unvoted, which is random, and this sub certainly fits the bill.

This is a neat take on the smurfs, which were an epidemic when I was growing up...

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Kassil Khirsah
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-13 12:30 PM
The classic career dragonslayer. A bit of a standard type - he needs a little more to make him be unique. Go to Comment
The Martyr's Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-31 05:48 PM
Not bad, though dealing the same damage to the wielder and the enemy means he can't beat low level foes he could otherwise dispatch easily without the sword. Go to Comment
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-08-23 11:03 AM
As others have said, it is a decent enough item with a negligible backstory. Better then a generic cursed sword, but could have been a lot better. Go to Comment
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