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NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-14 06:17 PM
A facinating spirit, containing the Communist ideal. Go to Comment
Thoktu Masif
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2016-05-27 03:07 PM
This is an excellent location. A bump from the depths of time.

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The Demon Mirror
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2016-05-09 01:19 PM
This is an interesting plot. I like how you make it hard for the player to sort out who's who.

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Ring of Stonekin
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-10 04:08 PM
Can't add to what has already been said, but I like this item(s) :). Go to Comment
Mona Island
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2014-04-04 10:55 AM
Guess the Dragon got him.
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Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-07-16 11:17 AM
There are various comments about it being somewhat munchkin. This can be waved away by the simple expedient of saying 'almost' anything. The potion has a limited duration that necessitates multiple doses, the potion does not keep well, and the ingredients are hard to get - likely leaving a trail of crime that could be traced. I would expect any defenses against magic your game system provides to still be valid, so resistance rolls, saving throws and the like should still apply.

In short(?), a well detailed, well described potion that certainly fits the category of a wish-fulfillment item.

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The Diamond Desert
Locations  (Area)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-14 12:19 PM
This is an interesting locale with lots of ideas.

On presentation - there are quite a number of typos - prarie, interpitation, etc, and there is a lack of spaces after punctuation such as commas and periods. There is debate about whether you should have one space or two, but you need at least one :)

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Pure Scent
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2016-01-27 11:46 AM
This is cool - I love 'simple' alchemical substances like this. Awesome!
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Johann's Cloth
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2015-04-02 09:38 AM
This is nifty! The unreproducible creation process is handy. Go to Comment
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-06 02:53 PM
An interesting idea, but I can't help but think this needs higher then average agricultural technology then the typical peasant farm of the middle ages. The government who set this up must have been quite organized and wealthy! Go to Comment
Noam Splinter
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2012-09-14 11:56 AM
A great NPC with great ideas in tow.

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The Great Market of Ushart
Locations  (Establishment)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2006-09-22 11:24 AM
Wow. Glad I'm not a mer-folk!

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Maganti Blades
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-23 06:22 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Ring of Opposites
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:59 PM
Simple, but potent. I'm not a fan of mere mortals being able to manufacture indestructible items, but that is a minor flaw. More to the point when its worn it binds, hard, with the person's mind and while you could physically remove it, it would destroy the wearer.

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Elemental Fused Weapons
Plots  (Discovery)   (Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2009-06-08 07:39 PM
Moving back to in work. Good advice has been given - please consider it. Go to Comment
Delgora Maldine
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-02 06:41 PM
Agree with CP on this one. There have been many worse.... Go to Comment
Delgora Maldine
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2009-06-08 07:42 PM
Take the advice given please and consider reworking it.

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The Staff of Silence
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-12-11 11:58 AM
A neat item - good backstory as said. Couple of things stuck out for me:

"Wizard named Felonious, who had been sentenced to a long prison term" Felonious?

Inconsistent/non-existing spaces after periods.

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Dalme The Tinker
NPCs  (Major)   (Knowledge/Lore)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-13 10:41 AM
This is a great NPC. I like his potential and what you can do with him. Go to Comment
New Hope
Locations  (City)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-06-06 11:35 AM
Well, I would think that if fracking is able to create earthquakes, a hurricane with the huge movement of water, and subsequent adjustment of load could have an impact.

If the city had been built below sea-level - an insane idea on an island - then a hurricane could easily, and permanently flood it, for the water would have no place to go. Now, if the ground beneath the city was riddled with mines, its possible the flooding could add enough weight to collapse the mines and drop the city deeper.

Amethyst occurs in rocks with volcanic or igneous origin, so the ground beneath the city would be quite strong unless it was heavily mined, contained extensive open spaces (empty magma chambers) or both. Perhaps the island itself is an extinct volcano. Go to Comment
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