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Big Red
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2006-11-10 07:04 AM
A good sub - quite original. There are still a few typos and oddities that could be fixed improve it. Go to Comment
Withholding Cup
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-12 09:52 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Judgment
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-29 10:27 AM
Another submission that is better as fiction or background myths. Moonhunter and Shadoweagle have covered off all of the important points. Go to Comment
Coalescelation Staff
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-19 12:27 PM
This is pretty cool, and could be a lot better with work! Go to Comment
Sitri Andromalion
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
valadaar's comment on 2014-04-03 10:59 AM
This is really an archtype - I kind of agree with Zylithan in that it feels a little generic, and more like a role as opposed to person. I don't' need to know his favourite animal, but I would like a little more.

As such, the plot ideas that build off this are the best part. Go to Comment
The Pillars of the Alchemist
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-18 09:45 PM
A great item, though the origin could be better.
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Malhonne Tranchan
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2014-09-29 11:42 AM
Here is a good one. Great character and great discussion. Go to Comment
The Hell of Dry Bones
Locations  (Desert)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2007-11-02 10:54 AM
Well, isn't this a buried gem! I love it! Go to Comment
The Hell of Dry Bones
Locations  (Desert)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2007-12-11 02:28 PM
BH! Go for it! We won't bite.... Much. Go to Comment
Dreon
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-04-16 09:41 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Ruin
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2014-09-30 11:17 AM
Well written, and has a Harry-Potterish feel to it. The lack of very sharp edges - the Gargoyles are basically grumpy but no psychotic, and the demon being a 'soft' power type contribute to that.

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Hucken Fyreb'lls
NPCs  (Minor)   (Technical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-07-02 12:09 PM
Amusing if not revolutionary.

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Dead Silk
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-16 03:06 PM
Heh, those evil threads could be VERY handy for assassins specializing in hunting mages.

It would be worth well above it's weight in gold as it sound like even segments of threads could be deadly.

Take an arrow and wrap one thread behind the arrowhead.... Go to Comment
Dead Silk
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2013-06-18 07:56 PM
A good one - dark and deadly. Go to Comment
Legend of the Warrior-Horse
Plots  (Travel)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-18 08:40 AM
Definately. Needs some polish though. Go to Comment
Jenny Green (maladous alertus)
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-17 11:28 AM
Excellent little herb! Go to Comment
Dareth Norune
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-24 12:02 PM
A decently detailed PC background, though it falls into the broken home/rape cliche that seems designed to do away with the complexities of having an actual family and all that entails.

Simpler to have no ties, yes, but cuts off an area for drama. Go to Comment
The Subtle Knife
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-29 10:48 AM
This was challenged and has been moved back into your in-work area. Go to Comment
Damian Levine
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-20 02:46 PM
I can see the effort was made to create this character, but I would almost go as far as Moonhunter on this one.

Loners make _terrible_ bounty hunters. You are doomed to have to find your mark by simple blundering, as no-one will give you the time of day.

A frankenstien monster will be treated as a monster, not hired and feted.

While not hopeless, it fills the description for a 1/5

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Disque Esprit
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2012-09-18 12:35 PM
I really like this idea. Adds details to a culture, especially if it is a local adaptation instead of a world-wide affair. Perhaps these were adopted due to a specific spirit or group of spirits that happens to be haunting this region for generations.

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