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Talahar
Locations  (Any)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-26 10:58 AM
A good start, but appears to be just that.

It is pretty unremarkable so far but could be a lot better. Go to Comment
Little Dark
Locations  (Forest/ Jungle)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2012-09-14 10:27 AM
Found this using unvoted, which is random, and this sub certainly fits the bill.

This is a neat take on the smurfs, which were an epidemic when I was growing up...

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Kassil Khirsah
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-13 11:30 AM
The classic career dragonslayer. A bit of a standard type - he needs a little more to make him be unique. Go to Comment
The Martyr's Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-31 04:48 PM
Not bad, though dealing the same damage to the wielder and the enemy means he can't beat low level foes he could otherwise dispatch easily without the sword. Go to Comment
Foolblade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-08-23 10:03 AM
As others have said, it is a decent enough item with a negligible backstory. Better then a generic cursed sword, but could have been a lot better. Go to Comment
Abasil
Locations  (Forest/ Jungle)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-01 08:34 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
golden golem soul coin
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-13 03:09 PM
This does have potential.

Take a look at other subs and flesh it out more. Take peoples advise on spellchecking.
If you need a word processor, check out OpenOffice (Google it). It's free and it works well.

You're the author - the mage's name need not be lost to history. I've suggested before that one can have the Players History which can be vague, incomplete and wrong, and then the GM's history which provides the GM what he needs to know about the item. Go to Comment
Lost Artifact
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-06 10:48 AM
Another sub where the discussion it elicits is better than the source.

An overly harsh intro, and he never submitted anything afterward. Go to Comment
Haran Hearthheart
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-18 02:44 PM
Okay, this is a hidden wonder. I agree with the commentary and love the writing.

Top notch! Go to Comment
Knooble Glitio
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
valadaar's comment on 2014-02-04 02:24 PM
Frankly, I've seen much worse, and its unfortunate that this author essentially quit after this submission.

I agree with Dozus.

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Race to Claim the Treasure of Shikan
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-22 01:27 PM
Writing and spelling are good, and the hook where this in fact a lie is good, but change Demon to Dragon, and you have the latter half of The Hobbit.



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Thunk
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-14 09:13 AM
I found this amusing and genuine. +5 Elven chain is damn good threads!

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Deadly Plague
Plots  (Duty)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2009-06-09 06:56 PM
Okay, if you want it this short, submit it as an idea seed, not a sub.


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Xander
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
valadaar's comment on 2014-04-15 02:52 PM
Great hook, no line or sinker...
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Everyoung
Locations  (Desert)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-07 07:09 AM
This feels like a somewhat coherent brainstorming session, and contains the seed or seeds of a good idea. Go to Comment
Demadex Canyon
Locations  (Area)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2006-12-08 02:16 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Cowpoke
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Heroic)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-07 01:11 PM
A nifty item for the right game setting. This idea could be used elsewhere.
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Dan the Dastardly Dog
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2006-09-28 10:27 AM
:)

Nuff said! Go to Comment
Aruziel Vlorain
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-04 08:00 PM
This is a nifty one and the different plot ideas are all great! Go to Comment
The Sands of Fury
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-18 02:43 PM
Personally, I like powerful items (to a degree) and a one shot hurricane item does not bother me, so long as it was dang expensive and difficult to create.
It could easily cause an "Oh Crap!" moment :)

I would have it take effect over a slightly longer period then 30 seconds. To affect miles and miles of clouds, the magic effect would need to take a while.
What if there were no clouds? I could see them appearing, but 30 seconds?

Now, this really is the equivalent to a magic Atomic Bomb and would need to be treated as such with attendant magical protections, security forces, etc.

An enemy mage could easily teleport (if available) into a city, plant and activate it, and then leave. Go to Comment
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