I agree with Captain Penguin. Also, there are some pretty bad run-on sentances:
The hunter left the wood and spent the rest of his life looking for the creature he never saw it again but many hunters to try to find it and some saw it, but their horses could not out run it and its mental power repelled anyone who got close. Go to Comment
Believable magic, like ordinary physicis, operates according to some invariable laws that always result in some kind of cost or "bounce back". The grater the magic, the more it should cost the character physically, emotionally, and spiritually.
Ideas ( System ) | February 8, 2005 |