The texts indicates we should remember that those who die in these tombs go to Merideth. Why would I remember that when this fact was not mentioned in the text until that point. It would be better to me for the text to indicate that those who die here have their souls sent to Merideth, and explain why. I would not make the assumption that the reader will have read all of the Aviontix before reading this sub, and this appears to be a major fact.
I had to do some searching to find out what Merideth is - the first occurance should be linked to improve readability, or even adding the phrase ("the Aviontix City of the Dead"), etc.
On a minor note - there are a few typos here - Gauntlet,greath,etc, and Larger has an extra capitalization.
On the plus side, it is interesting that an avian race would have tombs in the ground - it is contrary to ones expectations and provides a reason for what otherwise would be bizarre traps. Go to Comment
On presentation - there are quite a number of typos - prarie, interpitation, etc, and there is a lack of spaces after punctuation such as commas and periods. There is debate about whether you should have one space or two, but you need at least one :)
An interesting idea, but I can't help but think this needs higher then average agricultural technology then the typical peasant farm of the middle ages. The government who set this up must have been quite organized and wealthy! Go to Comment
Well, I would think that if fracking is able to create earthquakes, a hurricane with the huge movement of water, and subsequent adjustment of load could have an impact.
If the city had been built below sea-level - an insane idea on an island - then a hurricane could easily, and permanently flood it, for the water would have no place to go. Now, if the ground beneath the city was riddled with mines, its possible the flooding could add enough weight to collapse the mines and drop the city deeper.
Amethyst occurs in rocks with volcanic or igneous origin, so the ground beneath the city would be quite strong unless it was heavily mined, contained extensive open spaces (empty magma chambers) or both. Perhaps the island itself is an extinct volcano. Go to Comment