The writing is excellent, but I am having a bit of trouble sorting out the details.
What is provided is good for use as legends to provide to PCs, etc when researching the item, but the real details of the item would be useful. At some point we need a little more then pure narration. Some of the other formatting tools - Bold, Italics, BlockQuotes, in moderation, would help as well.
Where did it really come from and what are it's abilities?
That said, for a 1st submission, it is really good. Go to Comment