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Company of the Broken Oath
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-20 02:32 PM
These folks could be used in a lot of places, and it strongly reminds me of the men sent to the Wall in the Game of Thrones.

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Melissa O'Neil
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-07-27 10:32 AM
Nicely described and the archtype is usable in many genres. Go to Comment
The Tome of Life
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-29 08:38 PM
This is a really well done submission. The blanking of the book cuts off some drama though. Go to Comment
Centaur
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2006-08-31 07:13 PM
These are pretty cool - a force of these would make mortals tremble! Go to Comment
Sea of Sand
Locations  (Area)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-02-28 01:36 PM
Simple and evocative, the sea of sand being somewhat animate is a neat detail.

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Rampant Lions Company
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-21 10:12 AM
Obviously they would need to be selective about their contracts, as it seems they could not sustain much loss without losing their distinctive nature.

A good unit.




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Calcobrinan Cyclopes
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Natural)
valadaar's comment on 2006-09-06 06:45 PM
Have to agree with Ancient Gamer on this one. Go to Comment
The Citadel of Xolthog
Plots  (Duty)   (Mini-Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2008-10-17 09:17 AM
Cool - a little reorganization might help it, but quite cool. Need to explore the rest of the scenerios. Go to Comment
The Prophecies of Redemption
Plots  (Crisis)   (Mini-Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-25 12:48 PM
This is another incredible plot - brought forth to me by the Random sub.

Great job!

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The Prophecies of Redemption
Plots  (Crisis)   (Mini-Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-05 07:06 AM
Hey! Can vote now! Go to Comment
Crystal Hornets
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2006-12-14 07:50 AM
I like this a lot! I was thinking about something similar. Go to Comment
Equus Vigilia
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-23 12:27 PM
I do like this take on the Nightmare, I happen to like greek mythos monsters and this is an excellent treatment of the creature.

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The Wizard's Cache
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-11 09:47 AM
A key location in a campaign if I ever saw one. Nicely done!

I'd like to see some specific NPCs - either short and included in the sub, or new ones linked, would help flesh it out more. Go to Comment
Shard of Deluge
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
valadaar's comment on 2012-05-14 05:30 PM
With or without the silly demonizing of Drow, it is still good. It is not hard to remap the race since it plays little part in the nature of the item.
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Ice Ghoul -
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
valadaar's comment on 2007-07-31 11:05 AM
Not bad but it could use some more polish. Go to Comment
Looking for Love?
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2009-08-15 06:22 AM
Missed this one when it came out - not bad! Go to Comment
Splinter
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-04 10:28 AM
Needs a bit more work I think, though the evolution from a wooden practice weapon to a true weapon of war is an interesting concept. Go to Comment
Gnomish Riveter
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2006-10-26 06:43 PM
Now, for why someone would need/make something like this, I have one word:

Chainmail.

A smaller version of this device would be a godsend, as the best chainmail armor had riveted links. I've make chainmail the lazy way, by squishing links together with pliers, and that was tedious enough. I can't imagine the amount of work required to make a riveted suit with medieval technology... Go to Comment
Stebanos Paint
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2008-03-17 08:10 AM
Simple, effective and realistic - many real-world cosmetics include toxic materials, just in low (hopefully) doses. Go to Comment
The Order of Restraint
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-23 07:02 PM
Interesting, though I am reminded of the sharks in Finding Nemo.... Personally I think vampires should not be sugar-coated. They are anti-life and evil. But that's my opinion.

There are blatant spelling errors that should be addressed and some of the sentence structures need rewor - like
"In a world where rival vampires would like to get you out of the way to be on the safe side and where the inquisition hunts anything not 'natural' not to mention fledgling vampire slayers trying to start on less vicious vamps first they find there is safety in numbers. "

This should be three sentences - too much is being conveyed in one.

My advice - Take Moonhunter's Advice wholeheartedly. Go to Comment
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