A nice little worked up adventure. A tad heavy handed, but with careful handling it could work. Go to Comment

Like hearing how people use subs from here :) Go to Comment

I like this - though I'd have liked to have more ideas on the Dark Mysteries. Go to Comment

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I like it too and there could be many uses for such a device. For example, it could be a good anti-material type weapon - set fire to mantlets, siege equipment and the like, and used to terrible effect against calvary.  Maybe a regular arrow might not cause a war horse to throw a rider, but a red hot one?

 

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Okay Agony - there is some good advice here among the critique. Give it another shot if you would.

I've put it into your in-work . Go to Comment

I really like this item. Personally, I think that magic items should sometimes arise outside of the efforts of high-level spellcasters. The whim of the gods, magical accidents, by the hands of skilled artisans or the workings of lower power spellcasters. Go to Comment

Really neat - I need to read more of the shards now.

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It's a good start - feels a little incomplete. The core idea is interesting, though the motivation of the mages in incorporate the little fellow seems a little weak. Go to Comment

A nice, simple item which can be tossed in pretty much anywhere. Go to Comment

A role-model for pathetic underlings everywhere!

Reminds me of the house-elf in Harry Potter though. Go to Comment

I can forgive cliche - I tend in that direction from time to time, but the lack of attention paid to spelling and grammar (Again, I am no saint on that front) is somewhat less forgivable. Go to Comment

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This one is very good - an excellent little secret and treasure.
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Existing comments cover what I would say, apart from _guessing_ a springbolt is a gun.
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Wow, unvoted is bringing up gems.  I love this one! Top marks!

 

 

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I don't know, this is really cool!

I love subs which paint a mental pictures of places, and this is one of those. Go to Comment

Holy backstory batman! :) Go to Comment

I do thing random items have their place, maybe not in a serious campaign. I've seem some pretty funny episodes come from these types of items (Wand of wonder & Deck of many things).

If there was more to the item then just a list of random effects, I think it would be better received. Go to Comment