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The Ocadians
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-22 01:46 PM
That seems par for the course these days. A lot of subs are going barely voted upon.

With regards to this one, well detailed as per normal with your subs. My only complaint is that there needs to be some conflict to bring them to life. Go to Comment
Drostan the Bard
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-18 06:45 PM
Definately different and well written. Go to Comment
Drostan the Bard
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-19 01:17 PM
As it should - there are already too many words used for that purpose. I've never heard the word 'silly' being used in that context. Go to Comment
Elementals of Aterrizar
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-18 06:39 PM
Twisted, but in a good way!
Nice job! Go to Comment
Orthacarium
Items  (Materials)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-17 07:35 PM
Interesting and simple. I like it. Perhaps is should 'sizzle' just before it goes boom! :)

As for how it works, perhaps it reacts with oxygen, but needs UV light to trigger the reaction. Go to Comment
Legacy of the Pharaohs
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-14 06:41 PM
Always loved the flavour of ancient Egypt.

Definately have to work on something to add to this one. Eventually... Go to Comment
X-Jacks
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-14 06:44 PM
An excellent submission indeed. Sigh. Another one that I simply must contribute to! Go to Comment
X-Jacks
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-15 02:00 PM
So, Tohm Bones would be an example of a Bonejack... :) Go to Comment
X-Jacks
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-16 07:38 PM
My Iron Spike Golem could qualify as a -Jack as well - it is not one solid block of meterial.

Perhaps you can convert this sub to a Folio? Go to Comment
X-Jacks
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-16 07:58 PM
Scroll + Codex = Folio? (I think it's Moonhunters term, Scrodex seems rather.., well :)) Go to Comment
The War Walkers
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-14 06:47 PM
An interesting sub, though when compared with your excellent X-Jack sub, this one seems lightweight.

Still, I like the idea. Go to Comment
The Assault on Kerrengen Keep
Plots  (Hired)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-14 09:12 AM
Straightforward and adaptable - nicely done! Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 01:03 PM
Heh, when I voted on the main sub, this mace was still in it. As it stands it's quite good but really needs to be used with the main submission. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 02:01 PM
I agree with moving it apart - just that the mace is greatly enhanced by the details in the other sub. Go to Comment
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-14 06:54 PM
Quite interesting - as Wulf says, the use of the potions to take full advantage is a good limiting factor. Go to Comment
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-15 03:37 PM
Have linked it to Items of War.... Go to Comment
The Centaurim
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 11:27 AM
Well, thats one way to go about saving money on saddles :)

Great job! Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 11:25 AM
Hmm. And Scrasamax considered his Centurim submission disturbing.

Ugh!

But this is an excellent villanous organization and the tone of the piece is great!

Do you see the condition being curable once it has progressed to its full potential? Go to Comment
Pocket Ironbones
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-19 06:28 PM
K. Not sure where that came from Cheka! Go to Comment
Pocket Ironbones
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-12 11:13 AM
Hmm.

It does require some editing, but the idea of the swarm of little nuisences has great appeal.

The creation of skeletons from cloth and gemstones does seem rather convinient (perhaps they were able to find an ancient pixie burial ground and animated those instead of human-sized corpses. Or maybe assembled the dimunitive skeletons from cat/chicken bones) but I do like the concept of the small size being due to contractors cutting corners.

See, I'm rambling too. In short (pun intended) I think this is a good sub which needs editing. Go to Comment
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       By: Strolen

To become a warrior in a tribe. -no food, drink, or sleep for 4 days and nights. -change into special clothes and painted enter hut -slices of skin carved from their chest and shoulders -wooden skewers through the bleeding flesh behind the chest muscles -stout thongs, secured to rafters were tied to skewers -hoisted from floor by these and weights were attached to their feet -twirled around till fell unconscious -when recovered from this, given a hatchet to cut off their little finger -ropes then tied to wrists and force to run in circle like a horse until he passed out -if survive all this he can return to his family in honor knowing he is now a warrior.

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