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Siri Dai
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-10 10:29 AM
Interesting weapon - if it can be handled with one hand it sounds like it would be spectacular to see used paired.. Go to Comment
Surujin
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-10 10:26 AM
Useful and simple weapon.

Another use for Iron Spikes... :) Go to Comment
Dr. Emil Vincent
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-09 11:22 AM
An interesting character, my only concern is that the only reason presented for his apparent unstoppability is his intelligence. I think he needs a few more clubs in the bag to be able to kill that many people with impunity. Did he get mystical training ala The Shadow? Sell his soul? Find a mystical book of encantations? :) Go to Comment
Pataket
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-22 04:41 PM
None of us are Steven King, at least as far as I know:)

The best response to critique is to learn fromit what you can, and if it makes sense, incorporate it into your work.

I like this sub and the idea of a good, sane man trapped in the undead form. Go to Comment
The Biridian System
Locations  (World)   (Space)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-09 11:30 AM
Mmm. Time Loops.

I like it ! Go to Comment
All Flesh Must Be Eaten
Society/ Organizations  (Natural)   (Area)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-21 11:14 AM
A darker take on such things as Nihm and Redwall. Good stuff!
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The Shrew-Haters
Plots  (Mystical)   (Mini-Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2013-12-17 12:09 PM
Supereb Scras! Love it! Go to Comment
The Midwife's Book of Cures
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-08 09:06 AM
You know, things like this are ideal to bury your PC's who insist on reading any book they happen to chance upon.

Good job! Go to Comment
Order of the Yellow Rose
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-08 10:53 AM
An interesting history with lots of intrigue and rich background detail.

The idea of an order of knights which grows into something beyond the founder's intent is a good one. Go to Comment
The Mittle-Fish Manufactory
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-08 09:08 AM
Good little plot!

Now I'm hungry!

:) Go to Comment
Behind the Veil: The Traft System
Locations  (TransWorld)   (Space)
valadaar's comment on 2007-05-16 07:45 PM
A good solid planet, but I think it needs a little more spark. Either some of your humor or some of your unique darkness.. Go to Comment
The Stone of Mys
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-07 01:46 PM
Yup, I like this one as well.


#3 is my fav. Go to Comment
Oni, the Sorrow of Torment
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-07 01:36 PM
Excellent!

Great job Ria! Go to Comment
The Gate of Life
Locations  (Other)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-07 01:44 PM
I have to agree with the others on this one, but the idea is definately a good one! Go to Comment
Intrigue in the Hebra IX Cluster
Plots  (Crisis)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-07 01:42 PM
Have spacesuit - will Travel !
Great jog Muro! Go to Comment
Space Operas
Plots  (Crisis)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-07 01:38 PM
Sweet! As if I didn't have enough of my own subs to work on.... Go to Comment
Phlogiston Rod
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2012-11-26 07:24 PM
Great stuff!!
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Bandage Beasts
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-06 09:03 PM
Nicely done!

A very nice take on the classical mummy! Go to Comment
Consuming Fire
Items  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-06 08:55 PM
Don't agree it is too fast for a poison - some real ones are ridiculously deadly.
It could also be non-magic if one believes in spontanous combustion being a real thing and this being a substance which triggers such an event. Exploding is a bit much, though.

It is, however,a bit too easy to create for the level of power it has. Whipping it up under duress seems unlikely as well.

Also, those with low BMI might not be killed :)

It does need a little more fat to it though, Moonhunters requests would help flesh it out.

:) Go to Comment
A Poisoner's Almanac
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-06 08:49 PM
I think this a great idea for a scroll/codex!

Wait for it... I'll have to add to it :)

Edit: Hmmm, someone already did .. :) Go to Comment
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