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Short and Sweet
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-05-16 03:50 PM
Oh come on people! This is just a take on the world's shortest story.

"For Sale, 1 crib. Never Used"

Sheesh, if you are going to take off points, have the decency to comment on why. If you just don't like it, then don't add points. Go to Comment
Short and Sweet
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-05-16 04:00 PM
Then that requirement needs placed in the main submission preamble. I did not make this uber short because I was lazy. The ad was meant to provoke the question of Why was the tomb never used? Perhaps the would-be occupant disappeared, became immortal, etc.

Several other of the submissions are easily as abstract as this one, perhaps more evokative, but have no obvious begin/middle/end. Go to Comment
Short and Sweet
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-05-16 06:29 PM
Points taken :) Will rework it, if I can. Go to Comment
Short and Sweet
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-08-02 08:38 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Short and Sweet
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2007-11-04 05:53 PM
Forgotten Graves

Atrimis the sage is conducting geneology research and recently discovered an old, abandoned graveyard on the grounds of a large manor. He suspects that many of the gravestones will help him complete his research. However, it is occupied by various undead. It is located outside of the jurisdiction of any town, and the local nobility could not be bothered to help. Can you? Go to Comment
The Eolian Reel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-22 11:24 AM
Not bad.. :) Go to Comment
The Sonorous belled bracelets of Quokul
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2008-12-16 11:53 AM
Yes, a very good first sub - solid as the others have said. Nicely done! Go to Comment
The Plink
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2014-01-24 10:57 AM
This is a strange one. Mystical space virus that is a million years old, intelligent, and then just kills people.

Why? The why is left off, so all that is left are fake diamonds that kill people.

There is something here, but it seems very much blunted. Go to Comment
Tracer Poison
Items  (Potion)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-19 03:03 PM
I agree with Cheka on this, and there is room for improvement on some of the sentence structures. I'd suggest you read the sub out loud back to yourself.

All in all, this is a good first sub and the toxin quite useful. Arrow delivery of poison is not the best unless you are assuming people normally survive being hit by arrows. I'd see it more useful as a contact or ingested poison myself. Much more subtle. Go to Comment
Kel'Regar Technology
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-07 09:45 AM
Hmm, overlooked voting on this one. I do have a thing for organic technologies and these are pretty good! Go to Comment
Thoron, the Crystal Ones
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-18 07:37 PM
Hmmm. This one reeks of awsomeness!

Well Done! Go to Comment
Cuneiform Island
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-16 07:17 PM
Classic! There is a moral here - I know it. Now to find it. Where is that bloody slab?

Given how mad I get when I lose something, this would drive me mad far sooner then poor Fulminus! Go to Comment
Paradigm Shift and Magic
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-18 12:04 PM
Love the magic Theory articals! Go to Comment
The Silver Corp
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-16 06:36 PM
A really good first sub. Some interesting choices of words- the ships are in Ascending order btw - otherwise the 4000 tonner would have been first :) Go to Comment
30 Disasters!
Plots  (Event)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-16 01:17 PM
Too Fast! CRASH!!!! Disaster!

Nicely done!

One suggestion - Day of the Triffids! :) Go to Comment
The Oracle Edros
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-18 12:01 PM
A good solid Oracle. Well done! Go to Comment
The Kel'Regar: A Sci-Fi look at Elves
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2012-11-26 07:15 PM
Could have swore I voted before. This is a great sub! Go to Comment
The Songpit
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-12 09:14 PM
As the others have said - awesome idea, but needs a bit of polish. Get out the 'ole Brasso!:) Go to Comment
The Songpit
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-16 01:13 PM
It's a metal polish..

Used a lot of it during my Air Cadet days..... Go to Comment
The Consort of Uncle Jehan
NPCs  (Extras)   (Artistic/Performance)
valadaar's comment on 2007-04-08 08:51 AM
Yes, I like this as well. Nicely done! Go to Comment
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A culture believes that souls are recycled. One child gets half of a soul, another child gets the other half. However, this means that with each passing generation, the amount of soul in the child will become less and less (Through division)until their culture will die in the future because of their soulless offspring.

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