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Pillar of Presceni
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Sentient)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-02 02:53 PM
Nice - Not overpowering and has a definite cool factor!

Well done! Go to Comment
Steriks Island
Locations  (Other)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-01 06:26 PM
Good semi-solid Island.

Since they tolerate salt water they would be extremely useful to some people. Someone might even use them for desalination purposes :) Go to Comment
Butter of Disbelief
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-01 11:41 AM
An interesting submission - much better then a simple potion of the same powers.
Good job! Go to Comment
Butter of Disbelief
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-02 08:08 PM
You should create that Codex Chaosmark - I've got a couple to add to it! Go to Comment
Piash Nildar
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-01 11:52 AM
My first comment is that it needs spellchecked. There are enough problems to prevent me from objectively assessing the content itself.

Second would be with some of the sentence structures - you may wish, as MoonHunter often recommends, reading it aloud to yourself to see how the sentences flow. Go to Comment
Piash Nildar
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-04 07:50 PM
I can't help but be reminded of Vulcans - not that there is anything wrong with that. In this case we have a half-elf very much like Spock during Pon Faarsp.

Post is much better then it started, but it still needs a bit of work. Go to Comment
The Heirs of Polimanus
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-31 09:16 AM
Excellent!

One of these folks would make a great addition to the Menagerie of Madness! Go to Comment
Miscasting Black Essence
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2007-12-19 03:49 PM
Tis a big one - need to revisit! Go to Comment
Miscasting Black Essence
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2013-06-03 11:56 AM
Ring of Disappearance
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-30 03:52 PM
As to seperate dimensions or a single one, I didn't think about that, but one seems logical to me.

The 'body' would be in an odd state - being fire,earth and water - basically a 'Caloric' elemental, but it would lack any 'spirit' to animate it. I suppose an evil spirit could poach the Caloric body, again trapping the ring user in it's semi air form.


From Theory of Elements
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Thirdly come the four tertiary elements, the great fluids that permeate all things. These are each formed by the fusion, in equal parts, of the quintessence of three primary elements. They are Caloric (Earth, Water, Fire), Ether (Air, Water, Fire), Phlogiston (Fire, Earth, Air) and Vital Essence or Vitality (Water, Earth, Air).
..


It is built with the concepts discussed in Ians' Theory of Elements in mind or more specifically, the rebuttal I added to his sub insisting that Spirit is indeed a pure element, and not a combination of the four (which, by the way, this ring would prove by it's existance :) ) Go to Comment
Ring of Disappearance
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-30 09:03 PM
Up to you just how long is too long :) Go to Comment
Ring of Disappearance
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-02 07:25 PM
Other notes:

Even stuck in 'ghost' form, they retain about 25% of their strength and may be able to communicate their fate to others, though they are little more then a weak air elemental. Depending on the magic available in the campaign, there may be spells to undo the effect.

Sages or wizards highly skilled in Elemental magic may be able to detect the design flaw if they research the ring.

A simple plot idea could be the attempt to reunit someone who has been diselementized (new word?) - maybe even the ring's original creator. Go to Comment
Elziphar of Saliadonia
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-27 01:42 PM
LOL! Yes you do! Go to Comment
Elziphar of Saliadonia
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2012-10-02 02:45 PM
Update: Just testing Go to Comment
Crimson Hand
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-28 07:17 PM
If you have nanotech this good, you can always get your hands rebuilt later, if you get away.

Definitely a weapon of desperation. Go to Comment
It is a hard job to be a miner
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-26 11:35 AM
I like it - it is a good start to bigger things! Go to Comment
Hielo People
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-25 03:25 PM
An interesting race, but I do have a problem with the names of some of the characters in the backstory.

Perhaps if the sub had the 'silly' or similar freetext, but the use of the names greatly cheapens the submission and would earn a full point penalty if I voted now. Go to Comment
The Turgid Sands of Nesseraum
Locations  (World)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2007-01-24 12:20 PM
Wow!

I don't think I can vote other then 5/5 is appropriate for this amazing and expansive work!

My only question is the choice of location over plot, though this feels more like a mini-campaign. Go to Comment
The Turgid Sands of Nesseraum
Locations  (World)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2007-11-03 02:02 PM
Put one on for ya, David! Go to Comment
The Turgid Sands of Nesseraum
Locations  (World)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2009-01-09 08:38 AM
Spam bumped this one, killed the spap, but here's the bump anyway. Go to Comment
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