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7 Things about Team Building
Articles  (Fiction)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2016-03-24 01:45 PM
This is one of the great ones! Good for well organized groups of players, writing, and even putting together a convention event.
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Dungeons  (Underground)   (Puzzles)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-19 10:22 AM
Wow, excellent use of graphics and interesting puzzles. It is very old school style - the dungeon existing mainly as a test, with insta-death being common. Since you cite Tomb of Horrors as an inspiration, that part is not too surprising, and I would hope PCs going in would know this.

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Beans - Magic Beans!
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-14 02:48 PM
Getcher Magic beans here! Cheap! 7 beans for an old cow! Go to Comment
Federation Ship Types
Items  (Transports)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2015-04-09 03:14 PM
A nice set of ships. Very detailed. Love this kind of stuff. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-14 12:38 PM
I like these - brings back visions of Starcraft with infested units, but its still very cool.

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Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-12 09:57 AM
This is an excellent treatment of the Giant Monster vibe, apart from the creatures as deadly contaminates being as strongly put as they being a source of food/fertilizer. Though, given the low value of the individual in the Cosmic Era I guess they are not necessarily at odds.
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Balor's Embrace
Items  (Armor)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-05 10:21 AM
This hints at more, and I think covers the bases nicely. The bit about the dark spirits aiding the smith is a good one - I like this.

The nature of its chief ability - to counter pain - is loose enough to fit to many game systems mechanics, so really the determination of its power is up to the GM.
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228th Federation Infantry Battalion
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Area)
valadaar's comment on 2015-01-19 12:02 PM
A very detailed rundown of the unit, though there are not really any people detailed enough to make it much more than an equipment list. Being virtually wiped out, this seems more useful as a historical event in your campaign then anything else.
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Heraldry of the Underworld
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-05 10:44 AM
Hmm, thought I commented, but apparently did not click OK.
This has a lot of uses, and is a perfect fit with Tattoos.

These can be used also to adorn items to provide subtle clues to their abilities.
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Temple Order: Kord
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Area)
valadaar's comment on 2016-10-03 09:29 AM
Good job! The Phys ed. teacher of the gods :P
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The Black Leviathans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-30 02:43 PM
Update: Out with ye - Cult of Done! Go to Comment
The Black Leviathans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-30 10:15 PM
Its not broke - it was a filler link that didn't get filled..

Guess I'll need to fix it :)
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The Black Leviathans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2014-07-09 04:51 PM
Pieh? Wow! :)
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The Black Leviathans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2015-06-12 09:24 PM

Yes, this could be strengthened with more time spend on the examples - I meant them to not be cookie cutter creatures, but as individual as humanity in their natures. Also time and energy for the old Val standard has been lacking.

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The connected
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-30 08:41 AM
There are a few hive-mind type creatures, but there is no reason you can't add another :)

A quick comment on word structure - you have a couple of sentences which aren't really sentences.


"Though absorbing a group of mentally ill patients will not help their cause."

Drop the Though, and it works better.


"Forming temporary structures to get over walls or getting their brethren up on the ceiling for the upcoming ambush."

I'd suggest:

"They can form temporary structures to get over walls or getting their brethren up on the ceiling for an upcoming ambush.

I hope you don't mind this feedback - I tend to find stuff like this a little distracting and makes it more difficult for me to judge the idea on its own merits.

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The Cup that Floweth Over
Plots  (Mystical)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2016-03-15 10:28 AM
Apart from the idea that someone can speak for other people's souls this is a great side plot!

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Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-16 03:42 PM
Mmm. Spawnage! For the Swarm! Go to Comment
World Creation and the Citadel
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Citadel Help)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-11 11:08 AM
Great idea!

I can also create regions if needed. I have a somewhat abandoned one here -

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Letters; of Marche, Reprisal, and Blight
Systems  (Political)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-13 12:08 PM
A good idea, though there are some significant wording issues and typos that are very distracting to me, and take away from this idea.

Some sentences are not formed well. For example:

"Taking the enemies property in lieu of payment."

,.. Is what? Allowed? Not Allowed? Encouraged?

There are bolded words which are setup as links, but do not link to anything. Eg. Blight to the Realm people or Estate beast.

I would suggest putting this submission through spellcheck (Google docs is easy and free) or using chrome and it's built in one.

I would also suggest reading the submission aloud to yourself to catch the odd wording, sentence structure, and the occasional run-on sentence.
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The Omen
Plots  (Hired)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-28 08:21 AM
A good setup.
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