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Maw of the Daemons
Locations  (Other)   (Underground)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-08 07:48 PM
Update: Out wit ye! I'm done for now! Go to Comment
The Sea of Sand
Locations  (Regional)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-08 07:51 PM
I think this is excellent! Great job!

The idea is clear, reasonable and well written.

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Alicia 'Mad Alice' Napier
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 11:33 AM
Quite the backstory for quite the villain. Grotesquely done Scras!
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What's Come to the Fair?
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 11:19 AM

This is a good idea!

I'm afraid it needs a little more clean-up . For example:

"Cheating manoeuvre,s skillfully executed by card-sharpers and such like, in a clumsy-looking fashion (Resulting in being found out) could lead to a small riot at the fair, tainting various parties with calumny(?), hefty bills for damages both legal and physical, and wasted time, to say the least. "

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The City of Efeterthorp
Locations  (City)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 11:16 AM
A great little hive of villany!

Do you have a link to a higher-res version of the map? The current one is not really readable.

Why do they call their sewage disposal a portcullis? Thats a little confusing to me - there are few details given a portcullis has an existing specific meaning.

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Luck Points
Systems  (Technical/ Mechanical)   (General)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 11:05 AM
These are great, and I see no reason to limit them to being rewards for out-of-game activities.

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Volcano Trees
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 11:03 AM
A strange but interesting magical tree. Does it radiate heat as a result of its capturing magma?

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Dry Ice
Items  (Materials)   (Campaign Defining)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 02:34 PM
No, he didn't - the material becomes internally very hot by absorbing heat from the surrounds - cooling them.

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Dry Ice
Items  (Materials)   (Campaign Defining)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-10 10:59 AM
I like magical materials, but something seems off using them to create hot springs.

So access to the correct substances essentially disables its physics-bending features, turning it into simply really hot stone. This heat would transfer to the local liquid, heating it. This would continue until the stone was out of latent heat and matched the water's temperature. Unless the water was subsequently removed, it would not gain any additional heat and everything would return to normal until the water left in some manner.

Now, if the algae were killed when the water got too hot, and began to grow when it cooled off again, then I could see a sustained cycle occurring, keeping the water at the desired temperature for the algae.

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The Children of Ssstakhana
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 01:47 PM
This is great - the one-shot use means they must be carefully used, but that is not a detriment in my mind.

Nice visuals!
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Quarantine of Light
Plots  (Mystical)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 10:00 AM
An excellent and very reusable location!

This would be a great place for a McGuffin to be found. Go to Comment
The Guilds of Efeterthrop
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 09:53 AM
Agree with the comments. Token typo:

"Others would retrieve lost goods and others still would carry out political assignations on behalf of the people."

I assume you meant assassinations :)

Good sub. A nice example of a Kleptocracy.
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7 Things about Lovecraftian Fiction
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 09:25 AM

Love Lovecraftian stuff :)

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30 reasons why magic is mostly used for good
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-09 09:22 AM
Interesting. This actually could be written as an article without the use of the 30 format.

That might have provided a stronger discussion, and there would be less pressure to fill in the full 30 with weaker entries.

That said, this is an excellent collection of impediments on black magic - nicely done.
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The Clowns Gang
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Area)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-08 08:05 PM
Brutal in a good way. Great use of pictures.

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Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-08 08:02 PM
A good explanation of the demons of your world, though the first section is a little rough and needs to be reread.

Some is a little confusing:


Likewise, though the daimons will usually be a minor threat as they can't rejuvenate themselves in their home, some were originally powerful enough to be a significant threat in their time spent as a daimon.

So, even though they cannot recover from injury while on Atheus, they start off powerful enough to remain formidable for quite some time?

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Operation Slander
Plots  (Hired)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-08 07:52 PM
A great workup, but he seems rather vulnerable to those that would simply blow him up.

In which case, his clues would go poof too, so there is that. Go to Comment
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-10-07 01:25 PM
It would be interesting to see a king arise that held power not through his impotent army, and figurehead status, but through ties to the underworld. Blackmail, careful manoeuvring, intrigue. Keeping to the appearances of a lame duck, he would actually hold significant power. How the PC's play a role in this, perhaps they could give the impetus to change.

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Operation Black Rain
Plots  (Hired)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-24 01:45 PM
Its pretty good, though I would expect there to be more than one door between room 1 and the outside world, ideally with all access points provided with an airlock.

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Items  (Armor)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-24 01:15 PM
This submission is like the universe itself - pulling in bits and pieces everywhere into a cohesive whole.

These are great and form instant adventures for the game. Playing a mechwarrior/battletech campaign in this world would be wild fun.

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