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Silverfox Mill - Part I
Locations  (City)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-31 06:12 AM
Its about the sale, frankly. II caught my attention more as it was a plot, alive, and the maps were very well done. This sub is excellent background material but less alive.

As for how I would have rated Father basil seperately? Not too high - i would have put all the NPCs in a sub by themselves.

This is a deference to practicality on my part. Yes the sub flows better as one whole piece, but with the intent to elicit feedback, sometimes compromises need to be made. Overlarge submissions are something I tend to get caught up in myself.

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Silverfox Mill - Part II
Plots  (Discovery)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-28 07:42 PM
This is so well done, that even with some of my reservations, I must award top marks.

Linkage. If you use other submissions on this site, consider this a blanket request that you actively link them. Let me know if you need a hand with this, but linkage is how this site works.

Game specific stats

Thats about it, its a really awesome submission. Go to Comment
The Threat of Sugar
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Artistic/Performance)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-20 02:15 PM
Sweet use of the media. Modern. New. This is cool.

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The Residents of Oldport
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Local)
valadaar's comment on 2016-08-08 03:11 PM
Well, this is a good one. Lots of possibilities here, though what happens to the non-attacking living in this city? I seemed to have missed that point.
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Bishop Saul O'hara
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-16 10:33 AM
Excellent! I am very partial to the Bonesticher!
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30 Super-Villians
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2014-01-23 03:15 PM
I agree- we certainly could do something with this one.
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30 Super-Villians
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-14 10:19 AM
I'd put this one into Advice Requested and see what can be added! Go to Comment
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-14 07:50 PM
You really need to solicit some more entries to this before posting it as a votable sub. Post in the forum Fields of Challenge for help.

In the mean time, Public Draft would be the correct state for this sub - let me know if you want me to move it there.
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Impossible Iron
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Criminal/Espionage)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-16 12:58 PM
I like this fellow - lots of possibilities. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-10 09:24 AM
Indeed, this is excellent. It came to an end too quickly for me :)
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Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-10 12:12 PM
Right there. Did I say how many parts? NoooOOOoooo. :)

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30 More Minor Weapons
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-09 11:58 AM
Did this escape your in work folder? 8 is somewhat less than 30 :)

Also, could you use full sentences as opposed to fragments?


This broad sword appears to be made from grey stone. It is magically protected from all harm.

The use of fragments makes it seem more like quick notes and brainstorming rather than a completed submission.

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Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2015-01-08 01:20 PM
Great idea, but it needs cleaned up a little. For example, if you use chrome as browser you get instant and free spellcheck.
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30 Alien Races
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-05 07:54 PM
I will need to come back at this a few times, but what I've gotten cements this score for me.

Awesome EM. I am jealous! Go to Comment
30 Alien Races
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2015-09-12 11:35 AM
27) The Lone Architect

So saaaad :( Go to Comment
The Heads of Zaid
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2014-10-03 12:31 PM
I am a big fan of submissions that suggest things eons past. Well written and detailed.

Welcome to the Citadel! Thanks for posting!

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Navarch Ariana Sterngood
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-09-23 01:34 PM
I like this character - can serve as an antagonistic patron or enemy easily enough.
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Doctor Hugh Riot
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Technical)
valadaar's comment on 2014-09-15 12:36 PM
This is a great villain. He feels worse than both Dr. Doom and Dr. Octopus.

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Imbrian Culture
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Trans World)
valadaar's comment on 2014-09-08 11:23 AM
A very good writeup - lots of details and the tendency for these people to store stuff extradimensionally helps tie up the loose ends of where the heck are all the artifacts.

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Glassenheim Foundation
Society/ Organizations  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Trans World)
valadaar's comment on 2015-01-19 10:26 AM

Quite the society, seeming to be unassailable. A virtual Death Star for your hero's.


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