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Stears-Cusick Cyborg
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 10:41 AM
The use of the name Davros was the biggest clue given to their inspiration for me :)

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The Needwain
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Local)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 09:34 AM
Ah - Salvation Army meets the Illuminati :) Good idea with lots of potential.



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Congeria
Locations  (World)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 09:11 AM
Certainly a unique cosmological setup :)

So basically, we are talking about the Conservation of Souls. Souls can be transformed but never destroyed, and the total sum of souls in the 3 realms never changes...



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She Who Dreams
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 11:16 AM
Essentially the Dark Sun is a fantasy post-apocalyptic scenario, where much of the world is desert due to the destruction vested upon it. Defilers work by drawing life energy from the nearby area - permanently damaging the environment and potentially injuring live creatures nearby. 'Good' spellcasters - preservers if I remember correctly, do the same, but a slower rate that allows for recovery..



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She Who Dreams
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 08:54 AM
This submission does a very good job of setting up your world, and perhaps limitations on magic. They feel a bit like the Defilers of AD&D's Dark Sun - this is _not_ intended as any form of insult :)

This is an excellent submission - new member or not - and gets high marks from me.

Welcome to Strolens!

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OSF-05 - Wasp's Nest
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 08:40 AM
I like these. Every Oraki merchantman should have one of these in a hold somewhere for shotgunning pirates.

Is there any particular reason the Oraki would not omit the pilot altogether? Given the very 'simple' environment of space combat, and the relatively low population of the Oraki, I would expect them to deploy drone fighters and save their numbers for command and control functions like the Eye.

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Rebirth of the Fleet
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-09 08:42 AM
I think its time you made a Cosmic Era region, Scras.

I'd happily add these to the Science Fiction region, but these really need their own. :)
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Rebirth of the Fleet
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-06 09:57 AM
This is a great submission, and I love the idea of flying warships.

It funny in that the Cosmic Era, with all its darkness, has an optimistic side to it - more so than our own world. Regardless of its barbarism, public opinion has not managed to move real world governments away from nuclear, biological or chemical weapons.

In some ways, a world without nukes feels more fantastic than a world with warp drive.


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OSF-03 - Spinner
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-30 11:57 AM
This reminds me of my pressure washer :) I suppose you could have a mode that sends lots of little squirts over a wide area to deal with fighters and missiles as well. Or a fan-like blast. Being machines, you program all sorts of patterns into the nozzles to deal with the specific threat at hand.

Maybe even to act as a decoy, one of these could set their rockets to maximum diffusion, and fire all of them at once to surround their ship in wildly dispersed, slow-moving plasma, an irresistible beacon for heat seeking weapons, and potentially blinding to IR sensors nearby?

Or maybe I'm just being silly here.

In any case, this is a great idea!
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The Timeless Pocket Watch
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-30 12:06 PM
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The Timeless Pocket Watch
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-30 12:05 PM
A great item with lots of potential.    It is really well done, though one of Gossamer's questions highlights a minor formatting issue - some of the paragraphs need to be broken up. For example, even the description could benefit from being broken into more paragraphs - I would do so at the
"The glass, which protects"
and
" An expert watchmaker " 
 I think the watch would draw its power from the life-potential lost by its users due to the ageing, and so those with longer lifespans that humans would simply be aged a greater amount consistent with their extended lifespans. I'd rule Immortals could not use the item at all for the same reason. 
 Gossamer - the question on manipulation is in there, though it may have been added since you read it, but it is buried deep in a paragraph.

..."They will find it just as easy to move things as it was when time was not frozen, they could open doors, move people, but would not be able to manipulate anything too heavy for them, objects in this environment also defy gravity, and will float in the air if placed there"
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Lover's Downfall
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-30 08:10 AM
Short, simple and good. It has a Friday the 13th (TV series) feel to it. Go to Comment
Oscv 02 Baleful Eye
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-28 10:14 AM
I like these - I have put a little thought into this area as well. I would add a network of xray-laser mines as well. These would be scattered all about, running cold with just enough energy to monitor laser-communications with the Eyes, to avoid their detection.The source would most probably be an RTG using the nuclear warhead carried to generate the x-ray blast.

The Eyes would have all the sensors/intelligence and would use lasers to communicate with the mines, giving them their very simple instructions - a target vector - to fire upon.



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Progressive Stiletto
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-28 10:09 AM
I like these - simple items that can be used for a lot of things. This thing really is sort of pocket-sized Bangalore Torpedo. Go to Comment
Progressive Stiletto
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-28 10:10 AM
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The Flight of Retribution
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-27 07:53 PM
I personally do not like scripted plots once PC's are on the scenes, so I'd have the PCs awakened by a panicked crewmember. For some reason, perhaps they were overlooked in the confusion, the PC's come on the scene just before the discovery of the demons - the power outage threw them out of sleep, hard, and they emerge disoriented.

From that point on, they can influence the continued unfolding of events.

In any case, this is only my take on it above what has been said about the demons. I'd have at least filed the names off em :)



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The Flight of Retribution
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-27 07:54 PM
Kudos on an excellent and well-made plot!

I personally do not like scripted plots once PC's are on the scenes, so I'd have the PCs awakened by a panicked crewmember slightly before the demons are discovered - perhaps they were overlooked in the confusion. they come out with all hell breaking lose.

From that point on, they can influence the continued unfolding of events.

In any case, this is only my take on it above what has been said about the demons. I'd have at least filed the names off em :)



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Key, Quill, and Seal
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-27 07:43 PM
A great set of relics. One can not have too many of those, and these have a lot of uses. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-27 11:58 AM
Great creature, great selection of images. Love the battery :)

I agree with the Gossamer's point - I would not use the anachronistic description, regardless of its accuracy. Perhaps describe it as an oddly buzzing whistle?

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Jacob Latris
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-08-26 01:20 PM
An interesting character, though I would like some suggestions or plot ideas to use him. Of course he could be popped into the game as a generic diabolist, but there is more to him than that.

There are some odd sentences, including some run-on-sentences that are distracting to me.

It also needs run through a spell checker - there are a fair number of typos.





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