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Budiansky Drone
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-23 12:44 PM
Another great element for the Cosmic Era! I do like the old-school transformers a bit more then the current ones.






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Desert Rose
Locations  (Regional)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-20 01:20 PM
I really like the strong story-telling side to your submissions, and I like plant related submissions quite a bit. Good job on this one! Go to Comment
Dragon's Wake
Locations  (City)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-20 10:30 AM
A great tale, either to use as actual history, or at least a local legend.

Well written and I see how it ties into the Order of the Ivory Tower.

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Shardis, the Shining City
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-20 08:51 AM
The Eclipse certainly makes this submission - the city as it was was a nice high-magic city, but not overly remarkable. The transformation into the war zone gives it a desperate air and like Gossamer said, having the PCs there when all hell breaks loose would make the greatest impact.

Well done! This would make a very interesting mini-campaign. Go to Comment
Winter's Gem
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-19 02:42 PM


Very, very good! Love the tale and the idea of a perpetual storm.



This appears like it would be compatible with the Shards of the Storm set of items, from the ancient days of Strolens.



Shards of the Storm

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The Five Orders of Ivory Tower
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Country/ State)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-19 11:17 AM
This is quite good and these are interesting orders.

I noticed some odd sentences in the first paragraph, such as

"Built around the base of the mesa is another city Blessed Gathering is a home to many people and a center for trade and a stop along most of the safe routes through the desert."

I think the following sounds a little better:

"Built around the base of the mesa is another city called Blessed Gathering. This city is...."


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30 Dimensional Fatigue Events
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-12 09:31 AM
Was this _meant_ to fall into public view? :)
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30 Dimensional Fatigue Events
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 12:35 PM
A very well executed 30. So many ideas here :)

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Eshnes Pehe - The Blood Drinker
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-19 02:32 PM
This could easily work in Urban fantasy, perhaps even more so.

Someone like Hannibal Lecter (sp?) would be the perfect owner of this item, found during his years as a grad student screening artefacts. No one ever found his fellow student who disappeared on the dig...
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Devouring Fire
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-11 06:38 PM
One and a bit sittings on this one. Bit of a record for me. Go to Comment
Devouring Fire
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-11 07:51 PM
Thanks! I'm trying to shorten the time it takes for me to make subs by a few months.. :)
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Reliquary of the Rotting Legion
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-19 02:25 PM
A decent item, with lots of potential uses.

For a long-term plot, the spirit inside the box would want to get _out_. For a powerful necromancer, not having a physical body once he does so many not be that big a deal - many undead are non-corporeal. The trick would be how to get out without being drawn off to the afterlife and probably consignment to Hell or its equivalent.

Perhaps a plot could be an infernal being looking to collect the 'overdue' soul of the necromancer. Maybe even recruiting the PCs to this end.

As for why it is not more common - I'd say it could in fact be more common as making magic items by binding spirits within is a perfectly reasonable way to go.



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Demonic Pipe Organ
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Puzzles)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-18 09:40 PM
Yes Muro - keep going!:)

This is interesting, but would need the right game and players to use.
Id use it with the demonic appearance toned down, or perhaps hidden until it is played with intensity by someone who knows how to play.
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Refuge Beneath the Waves
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 10:25 AM
It shares some themes with Bioshock (I and II, concerning the undersea city Rapture), but the circumstances are very different.

I think this is a good start, it lays out the groundwork for additional work.

I found the descriptions of the vehicles rather mundane and not really fitting in with the grander scale of the rest of the submission. I'd have sooner seen more details about the people since the root technology and location was covered. Go to Comment
The Tower of NON
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 10:16 AM
An interesting take on antigravity, though it requires a very specific worldview.

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Dimensional Tap Reactor
Items  (Tools)   (Cursed)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 08:11 AM
You are really ramping up on this setting. So much material, and done well.

I truly envy your energy :)
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The Most Serene and Devoted Temple of the Moon
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 08:03 AM

It works very well as a fairy tale for me, and has lively imagery.
MysticMoons comment does it for me.

If it were not a fairy tale, than the Silver and Gold would have to be something like gilded stone, as anything approaching an 'enormous' ball of silver, gold or even copper would be ruinously expense, and impossible to catapult without a tremendously strong and/or magical catapult.

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The Scavengers
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - Genre)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-16 07:56 AM
Class V Sourcebook material :)

No idea why no other comments, but this is really great stuff! Go to Comment
Dwarven Calendar
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-12 09:18 PM


An interesting system that is one answer to how underground races would handle time. Lots of detail and a good use of images.



I saw one sentance that could use another look:



Any Most other subterranean dwarven settlements all will have at least one geyser that erupts roughly at the same time as the gesyer in the mother halls.

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Dwarven Calendar
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2013-09-12 09:21 PM
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